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1. As computers are being used more and more in education, there will be soon no role for teachers in the classroom. v.2

1. As computers are being used more and more in education, there will be soon no role for teachers in the classroom. v. 2
Information technology, today, has a tremendous impact on different aspects of modern life, no except the field of education. Lots of students study relying on computers to search for necessary information or knowledge related to the subjects, particularly participating in online courses, studying in online groups or entertainment. Thus, some people believe that computers will soon replace the role of teachers in the classroom. Normally, the teachers play a key role in bringing students important knowledge or information on subjects or give tasks to students in the classroom. However, today, instead of the teachers, the technological device will do these roles. For example, in some public primary schools in Vietnam, pupils have an opportunity to get access to early to the computers or the Internet through learning online foreign languages, joining in online competition or learning IT. Although we could not deny the benefits of using computers in education, the attendance of teachers in the classroom is still very indispensable. There are some lessons only teachers could teach their students because the schools not only teach students knowledge, but also soft skills, moral lessons and shaping them in good characteristics. It is the most crucial responsibility of schools in educating the students, specifically, the duty of teachers in the classroom no matter how developed and complicated the software is. Ultimately, in my perspective, the students could not separate away from the teachers in the classroom as the computer is only a multi-function assistant device for students in learning process and unable to totally replace the teachers.
Information technology,
today
, has a tremendous impact on
different
aspects of modern life,
no
except the field of education. Lots of
students
study relying on computers to search for necessary information or knowledge related to the subjects,
particularly
participating in
online
courses, studying in
online
groups or entertainment.
Thus
,
some
people
believe that computers will
soon
replace the role of
teachers
in the classroom.

Normally
, the
teachers
play a key role in bringing
students
important
knowledge or information on subjects or give tasks to
students
in the classroom.
However
,
today
,
instead
of the
teachers
, the technological device will do these roles.
For example
, in
some
public primary schools in Vietnam, pupils have an opportunity to
get
access
to early to
the computers or the Internet through learning
online
foreign languages, joining in
online
competition or learning IT.

Although we could not deny the benefits of using computers in education, the attendance of
teachers
in the classroom is
still
very
indispensable. There are
some
lessons
only
teachers
could teach their
students
because
the schools not
only
teach
students
knowledge,
but
also
soft
skills
, moral lessons and shaping them in
good
characteristics. It is the most crucial responsibility of schools in educating the
students
,
specifically
, the duty of
teachers
in the classroom no matter how developed and complicated the software is.

Ultimately
, in my perspective, the
students
could not separate away from the
teachers
in the classroom as the computer is
only
a multi-function assistant device for
students
in learning process and unable to
totally
replace the
teachers
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay 1. As computers are being used more and more in education, there will be soon no role for teachers in the classroom. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
256 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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