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1. As computers are being used more and more in education, there will be soon no role for teachers in the classroom. v.1

1. As computers are being used more and more in education, there will be soon no role for teachers in the classroom. v. 1
In general, most people working 8 hours a day, even overwork. Our brain can be exhausted from dealing with tasks and solving problems on their duty. Therefore, the only thing wants to do is relax on the sofa, turn on the TV or swipe the smartphone without thinking after work. Our body just wants to relax. Usually, people think about life should be more interesting, balance them can be a chaotic multi-task. The main reason that causes energy and hard to achieve a better lifestyle, it could be overly working. Our brain and body took a great deal of energy from tasks, it is difficult to focus on other new things. Despite, playing games and watching TV are still taking part in thinking. However, It is a smaller impact of consuming of brain energy. On the contrary, it easily achieves relaxation rather than having dinner with friends. Achieving a good lifestyle. It should be redefined, what is our purpose of living, and how career could be fulfilled in our being. Employment can be part of our fuel if we do not think about it as a negative thing. For instance, like a toilet cleaner, who loves clean toilets? No one. If, we change the way of thinking, such as, how to develop an efficient solution of a cleaning process, and contribute to other workers or even propose to the supervisor working environment would be more positive and challenge. Furthermore, exercise is a very powerful solution to balance the tiredness from undertaking and increase our living quality. Yoga and meditation are also terrific ideas to balanced. Nevertheless, extra activities after work sound intimidated, as long as find one thing that you interested in your life and gradually do it. Be disciplined, but no pressure to push. Balance life and work are not far from you.
In general
, most
people
working 8 hours a day, even overwork. Our brain can
be exhausted
from dealing with tasks and solving problems on their duty.
Therefore
, the
only
thing wants to do is relax on the sofa, turn on the TV or swipe the smartphone without thinking after work. Our body
just
wants to relax.
Usually
,
people
think
about life should be more interesting, balance them can be a chaotic multi-task.

The main reason that causes energy and
hard
to achieve a better lifestyle, it could be
overly
working. Our brain and body took a great deal of energy from tasks, it is difficult to focus on other new things. Despite, playing games and watching TV are
still
taking part in thinking.
However
, It is a smaller impact of consuming of brain energy.
On the contrary
, it
easily
achieves relaxation
rather
than having dinner with friends.

Achieving a
good
lifestyle. It should
be redefined
, what is our purpose of living, and how career could
be fulfilled
in our being. Employment can be part of our fuel if we do not
think
about it as a
negative
thing.
For instance
, like a toilet cleaner, who
loves
clean toilets? No one. If, we
change
the way of thinking, such as, how to develop an efficient solution of a cleaning process, and contribute to other workers or even propose to the supervisor working environment would be more
positive
and challenge.

Furthermore
, exercise is a
very
powerful solution to balance the tiredness from undertaking and increase our living quality. Yoga and meditation are
also
terrific
ideas
to balanced
.
Nevertheless
, extra activities after work sound intimidated, as long as find one thing that you interested in your life and
gradually
do it.
Be disciplined
,
but
no pressure to push. Balance life and work are not far from you.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay 1. As computers are being used more and more in education, there will be soon no role for teachers in the classroom. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
304 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 7.0
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Grammatical Range: 7.0
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