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some people prefer to have their main meal at noon. some other prefer to have their main meal later in the evening. Which one do you prefer and why? v.1

some people prefer to have their main meal at noon. some other prefer to have their main meal later in the evening. Which one do you prefer and why? v. 1
ืีA large number of people think that they have too many choices in the present. In my opinion, I completely disagree that having a numerous choice is a bad thing. Firstly, having a choice means you are free from being forced and that is the starting point of everything, because creativity and imagination are the result of an ability to select your own option. For example, you have to create a light bulb with only three ingredients, if it fails, you will never find a way to create it, but if it is a success you will never find a better way to make it better due to a limited of choosing your own item. Secondly, from the point of view of most citizens as a customer, having choice will likely prevent companies from taking advantage. Such as, low quality product with high price and bad customer services. By that reason, a numerous choice is the only way to guarantee that you will not get robbed by companies and you can seek for the best of your friend and family. However, most companies will think the other way, because they will have more competitor due to people can selected only for what they want, and that will cost them more fund at the market, which will make them lose their profit surely. This is the main reason why people were told that they have too many options, because they heard it from the company who stay on the other side, and that is how the marketing work in real life business. In conclusion, having a choice is the only way to secure that people are a freeman, and by that freedom, imagination and creativity of the people will never be restricted, and no one can take advantage of you without your consent.
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means you are free from
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and
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creativity and imagination are the result of an ability to select your
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own
option.
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only
three ingredients, if it fails, you will never find a way to create it,
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but
if it is a success you will never find a better way to
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make
it better due to a limited of choosing your
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own
item.

Secondly
, from the point of view of most citizens as a customer,
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prevent
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companies
from taking advantage. Such as, low quality product with high price and
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bad
customer services. By that reason, a numerous
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choice
is the
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only
way to guarantee that you will not
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get
robbed by
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companies
and you can seek for the best of your friend and family.

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companies
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the other way,
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people
can selected
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only
for what they want, and that will cost them more fund at the market, which will
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make
them lose their profit
surely
. This is the main reason why
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people
were
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told
that they have too
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options,
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because
they heard it from the
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company
who stay on the other side, and
that is
how the marketing work in real life business.

In conclusion
,
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having
a
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choice
is the
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only
way to secure that
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people
are a freeman, and by that freedom, imagination and creativity of the
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people
will never
be restricted
, and no one can take advantage of you without your consent.
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IELTS essay some people prefer to have their main meal at noon. some other prefer to have their main meal later in the evening. Which one do you prefer and why? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
302 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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