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07. 11. 2017 A family member is coming to stay with you. He/she will be arriving by train in the morning, but you won’t be home until the evening. Write a letter to your relative. In your letter: explain arrangements you have made for them to have keys and v.1

07. 11. 2017 A family member is coming to stay with you. He/she will be arriving by train in the morning, but you won’t be home until the evening. Write a letter to your relative. In your letter: explain arrangements you have made for them to have keys and v. 1
Nowadays, walking people do only out of the necessity, not for fun. Obviously, there are many reasons for this and by adopting certain strategies this issue can be effectively tackled. This essay will discuss causes and solutions for this. First and foremost, since employees live away from their office there is no opportunities to either walk or cycle to work place. Additionally, due to sprawling subways and heavy traffics make it impossible to walk. Pedestrian path also witnessed heavy traffics. These days, many people largely depend on cars because of its convenience and speed, sometimes, they become slaves of cars as well. By contrast, if anyone tried to walk on these roads, they would meet accidents as these roads are not meant for both walking and cycling. However, there are some measures could change this issue dramatically. One possible method is that constructing more foot paths. Eventually, this encourages the public to walk, along with this, they should be educated regarding incredible benefits of this. The government can channelize more public funds to these kinds of initiatives, which can have a long term advantages. Another obvious idea is that motivate tourist organizations to start more and more walking tour packs. Additionally, the government can give some incentives to attract people to walk by providing, for instance, cycles, and running shoes. By way of conclusion, even though people of current generation walk minimally when compares with the older generation, by implementing new initiatives this can be significantly improved. It is vital that walking to be encouraged at a very young at school levels.
Nowadays, walking
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people
do
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only
out of the necessity, not for fun.
Obviously
, there are
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many
reasons for this and by adopting certain strategies this issue can be
effectively
tackled. This essay will discuss causes and solutions for this.

First
and foremost, since employees
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live
away from their office
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there is no opportunities
to either
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walk
or cycle to work place.
Additionally
, due to sprawling subways and heavy traffics
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make
it impossible to
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walk
. Pedestrian path
also
witnessed heavy traffics. These days,
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many
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people
largely
depend on cars
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because
of its convenience and speed,
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sometimes
, they become slaves of cars
as well
. By contrast, if anyone tried to
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walk
on these roads, they would
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meet
accidents as these roads are not meant for both walking and cycling.

However
, there are
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some
measures could
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change
this issue
dramatically
. One possible method is that constructing more foot paths.
Eventually
, this encourages the public to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
walk
, along with this, they should
be educated
regarding incredible benefits of this. The
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
can channelize more public funds to these kinds of initiatives, which can have a long term advantages. Another obvious
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idea
is that motivate tourist organizations to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
more and more walking tour packs.
Additionally
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
can give
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
incentives to attract
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people
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
walk
by providing,
for instance
, cycles, and running shoes.

By way of conclusion,
even though
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people
of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
generation
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walk
minimally
when compares with the older generation, by implementing new initiatives this can be
significantly
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improved
. It is vital that walking to
be encouraged
at a
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very
young at school levels.
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IELTS essay 07. 11. 2017 A family member is coming to stay with you. He/she will be arriving by train in the morning, but you won’t be home until the evening. Write a letter to your relative. In your letter: explain arrangements you have made for them to have keys and v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
262 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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