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04/11/2017Your neighbours have a dog that is noisy at night. You can’t sleep. Write a letter to your neighbours. In your letter: – describe the problem with the dog– explain why it is important for you to sleep– outline what your neighbours could d v.1

04/11/2017Your neighbours have a dog that is noisy at night. You can’t sleep. Write a letter to your neighbours. In your letter: – describe the problem with the dog– explain why it is important for you to sleep– outline what your neighbours could d v. 1
Studying abroad has become a new trend of our generation who decided to continue their study after the high school, even though the overall cost requirement is quite high. Personally, I feel that this is definitely worth it, and I will explain why. Firstly, studying abroad is a great opportunity to perfecting a specific knowledge area, as some countries are known to be an expert at something. For example, Japan and Germany are believed to be the best place to study engineering. Furthermore, it opens up a possibility to meet people from different kind of culture and background, which will widen our eyes on how we understand people and the world as a whole. Finally, as we build ourself a friendship link, we also build a business link that might be useful in the future work life. I do understand the opposing view, which is that those who go overseas is often does not want to come back to their country, and prefer staying there to continue their currently develop life. Those things happen quite frequently, especially in the developing country, where Their domestic colleges are not as competitive as the others. As a result, this kind of act is harming their country of origin, but with a lot of recent scholarship programs that require the applicants to come back to their country after finishing their study are a great compromise for both sides. To conclude, I believe that studying abroad gives a lot of benefits that it is actually outweighed the disadvantages, provided that they will come back and continue to help developing their country of origin.
Studying abroad has become a new trend of our generation who decided to continue their study after the high school,
even though
the
overall
cost requirement is quite high.
Personally
, I feel that this is definitely worth it, and I will
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explain
why.

Firstly
, studying abroad is a great opportunity to perfecting a specific knowledge area, as
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some
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countries
are known
to be an expert at something.
For example
, Japan and Germany
are believed
to be the best place to study engineering.
Furthermore
, it opens up a possibility to
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meet
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people
from
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different
kind of culture and background, which will widen our eyes on how we understand
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people
and the world as a whole.
Finally
, as we build
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ourself
a friendship link, we
also
build a business link that might be useful in the future work life.

I do understand the opposing view, which is that those who go overseas is
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often
does not want to
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come
back to their
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country
, and prefer staying there to continue their
currently
develop life. Those things happen quite
frequently
,
especially
in the developing
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country
,
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Their domestic colleges are not as competitive as the others.
As a result
, this kind of act is harming their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
of origin,
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but
with
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a lot of
recent scholarship programs that require the applicants to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
back to their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
after finishing their study are a great compromise for both sides.

To conclude
, I believe that studying abroad gives
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a lot of
benefits that it is actually outweighed the disadvantages, provided that they will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
back and continue to
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help
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developing
their
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country
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7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay 04/11/2017Your neighbours have a dog that is noisy at night. You can’t sleep. Write a letter to your neighbours. In your letter: – describe the problem with the dog– explain why it is important for you to sleep– outline what your neighbours could d v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
268 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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