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Recently you had a holiday overseas and you stay with a family member who has sent you a letter and some photos of your holiday. Write a letter to your family member -thanks for the photos and for the holiday -explain why you did not send a letter -invite v.1

Recently you had a holiday overseas and you stay with a family member who has sent you a letter and some photos of your holiday. Write a letter to your family member -thanks for the photos and for the holiday -explain why you did not send a letter -invite v. 1
More and more of us go to tourist hot spots when there is a national holiday. This essay will suggest that the biggest problem this causes is litter and submit providing extra bins as the best solution, followed by a reasoned conclusion. The primary drawback of so many people visiting the same place at the same time is the dropping of packaging, plastic bags, bottles and even human waste in public areas. There are simply not enough places to dispose of rubbish properly and this often leads to people dumping it wherever they like. This results in public places becoming unsightly, unhygienic, and smelly and even results in the destruction of public property. For example, Thanh Nien News in Vietnam recently reported that during the weeklong holiday in May 2015, the beach resort of Vung Tau was swamped with more tourists than it could cope with and this resulted in the parks and beaches quickly becoming covered in filth. A viable solution to this issue could be the use of more waste disposal facilities during peak periods. Extra places to dispose of waste could be deployed so that there are always options for people who need them and it could also be made clear where waste should be brought. For instance, at large events such as Glastonbury Festival in the UK, thousands of extra bins are installed in the adjacent town to cope with the extra refuse. To conclude, the major issue with too many holidaymakers is people leaving waste behind and a possible way to solve this is to deploy extra receptacles.
More and more of us go to tourist hot spots when there is a national holiday. This essay will suggest that the biggest problem this causes is litter and submit providing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
extra
bins as the best solution, followed by a reasoned conclusion.

The primary drawback of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
visiting the same
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
place
at the same time is the dropping of packaging, plastic bags, bottles and even human
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
waste
in public areas. There are
simply
not
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
places
to dispose of rubbish
properly
and this
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
often
leads to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
dumping it wherever they like. This results in public
You should probably use "place".
places
becoming
unsightly
, unhygienic, and smelly and even results in the destruction of public property.
For example
, Thanh
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Nien
News in Vietnam recently reported that during the weeklong holiday in May 2015, the beach resort of
Possible spelling mistake found.
Vung
Tau
was swamped
with more tourists than it could cope with and this resulted in the parks and beaches
quickly
becoming covered in filth.

A viable solution to this issue could be the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of more
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
waste
disposal facilities during peak periods.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Extra
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places
to dispose of
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waste
could
be deployed
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that there are always options for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
who need them and it could
also
be made
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
where
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
waste
should
be brought
.
For instance
, at large
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
events
such as Glastonbury Festival in the UK, thousands of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
extra
bins
are installed
in the adjacent town to cope with the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
extra
refuse.

To conclude
, the major issue with too
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
holidaymakers is
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
leaving
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
waste
behind and a possible way to solve this is to deploy
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
extra
receptacles.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Recently you had a holiday overseas and you stay with a family member who has sent you a letter and some photos of your holiday. Write a letter to your family member -thanks for the photos and for the holiday -explain why you did not send a letter -invite v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
263 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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