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You took your family to a nearby restaurant. You were disappointed with the meal and wish to complain to the manager. Write a letter to the manager of the restaurant. In the letter: explain why you were at the restaurantdescribe the problemswrite about the v.8

You took your family to a nearby restaurant. You were disappointed with the meal and wish to complain to the manager. Write a letter to the manager of the restaurant. In the letter: explain why you were at the restaurantdescribe the problemswrite about the v. 8
Dear Mr Mark, I am writing this letter to seek your attention regarding a very concerning issue that I and my family faced last night during our visit to your hotel. First let me tell you that I am very fond of the traditional food that is the specialty of your hotel. I was the one who convinced and encouraged my family to have at least one meal at your restaurant as ambiance and taste that I used to had, was phenomenal. We were there at your restaurant at 08: 00PM and we ordered soup and prawn as starter and three of your Chef specials from main menu. Initially all was going smooth, soup was great as usual and so were the prawns. We were anxiously waiting for the main course as we were expecting that as good as starter was. But to our surprise, food served to us was totally bland in taste and was stale as well. Upon asking, the server started arguing and misbehaving with us and we were asked to pay for that rotten food. I have no issues in paying the bill but the way your staff behaved with me and my family, left us speechless and turn us from promoter to detractor for this beautiful food place. I urge you to take necessary action against the staff and immediately conduct their training on behavioral aspects as it is essential in service industry. Hope to get some ears to my complaint. Yours sincerely, Jacob Martin
Dear Mr Mark,

I am writing this letter to seek your attention regarding a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
concerning issue that I and my family faced last night during our visit to your hotel.
First
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let
me
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tell
you that I am
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very
fond of the traditional food
that is
the specialty of your hotel. I was the one who convinced and encouraged my family to have at least one meal at your restaurant as ambiance and taste that I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
to had, was phenomenal.

We were there at your restaurant at 08:
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00PM and
we ordered soup and prawn as starter and three of your Chef specials from main menu.
Initially
all was going smooth, soup was great as usual and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
were the prawns. We were
anxiously
waiting for the main course as we were expecting that as
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
as starter was.
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But
to our surprise, food served to us was
totally
bland in taste and was stale
as well
. Upon asking, the server
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
started
arguing and misbehaving with
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
us and
we
were asked
to pay for that rotten food.

I have no issues in paying the bill
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
the way your staff behaved with me and my family,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
left
us speechless and turn us from promoter to detractor for this
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
beautiful
food place. I urge you to take necessary action against the staff and immediately conduct their training on behavioral aspects as it is essential in service industry. Hope to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
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some
ears to my complaint.

Yours
sincerely
,

Jacob Martin
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
If you talk to a man in a language he understands, that goes to his head. If you talk to him in his own language, that goes to his heart.
Nelson Mandela

IELTS academic You took your family to a nearby restaurant. You were disappointed with the meal and wish to complain to the manager. Write a letter to the manager of the restaurant. In the letter: explain why you were at the restaurantdescribe the problemswrite about the v. 8

Academic
  American English
6 paragraphs
249 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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