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The bar charts illustrates the amount of electricity produced and utilized by ten different countrie in 2014. summarise the information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.2

The bar charts illustrates the amount of electricity produced and utilized by ten different countrie in 2014.
The bar charts illustrates the quantity of electricity produced and utilized by ten different countries in 2014. Overall, China and United States manufactured significantly higher volume of electricity than any other countries on the list which is approximately four times higher than that by the third country of the list. Almost for all of the countries in the list, the amount of electricity created is higher than consumed, but Germany is the only country that used more electricity than its production. China clinched the top position with 5398 billion kWh of electricity, meanwhile they processed 5, 322 billion kWh. Meanwhile United states falls short from china by around 300 billion kWh of electricity which secured them the second position. There is a substantial difference between the top two and bottom eight countries in the chart which is around 3000 kWh between United states at position two and Russia at position three. In addition to that, bottom four countries produced around 564. 2 billion kWh of electricity and consumed about 450 billion kWh of it where Korea, Rep positioned at the bottom of the chart with 485. 1 kWh.
The bar charts
illustrates
the quantity of
electricity
produced and utilized by ten
different
countries
in 2014.

Overall
, China and United States manufactured
significantly
higher volume of
electricity
than any other
countries
on the list which is approximately four times higher than that by the third
country
of the list. Almost for
all of the
countries
in the list, the amount of
electricity
created is higher than consumed,
but
Germany is the
only
country
that
used
more
electricity
than its production.

China clinched the top position with 5398
billion
kWh of
electricity
, meanwhile they processed 5, 322
billion
kWh.
Meanwhile
United states
falls short from
china
by around 300
billion
kWh of
electricity
which secured them the second position.

There is a substantial difference between the top two and bottom eight
countries
in the chart which is around 3000 kWh between
United states
at position two and Russia at position three.
In addition
to that, bottom four
countries
produced around 564. 2
billion
kWh of
electricity
and consumed about 450
billion
kWh of it where Korea, Rep positioned at the bottom of the chart with 485. 1 kWh.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS academic The bar charts illustrates the amount of electricity produced and utilized by ten different countrie in 2014.

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4 paragraphs
188 words
6.0
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