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The diagram below hows how salt is removed from sea water to make drinkable. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.2

The diagram below hows how salt is removed from sea water to make drinkable.
The diagram depicts the various stages to discard the salt from sea water to make it suitable for drinking. First of all, the saltwater is broughtin from the sea to a pretreatment filter by a water intake. From this, filter backwash is removed and is returned to the sea. At the next stage of the process, the water is forced through a membrane at high pressure in order to allow only the water modecules to pass through while salt and other impurities are stopped and the seawater concentrate is sent back to the sea. Next, the water is post-treated with some chemicals such as lime, chlorine and fluoride to obtain drinkable freshwater. It then is transported to the storage where it is distributed to the public via a water supply system. To sum up, the water which results from this process is clean and drinkable because the harmful ingredients, as well as the salt, are removed.
The diagram depicts the various stages to discard the salt from sea
water
to
make
it suitable for drinking.

First of all
, the saltwater is
broughtin
from the sea to a pretreatment filter by a
water
intake. From this, filter backwash
is removed
and
is returned
to the sea. At the
next
stage of the process, the
water
is forced
through a membrane at high pressure in order to
allow
only
the
water
modecules
to pass through while salt and other impurities are
stopped
and the seawater concentrate is
sent
back to the sea.

Next
, the
water
is post-treated with
some
chemicals such as lime, chlorine and fluoride to obtain drinkable freshwater. It then
is transported
to the storage where it
is distributed
to the public via a
water
supply system.

To sum up, the
water
which results from this process is clean and drinkable
because
the harmful ingredients,
as well
as the salt,
are removed
.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS academic The diagram below hows how salt is removed from sea water to make drinkable.

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4 paragraphs
156 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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