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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task The line graph below provides information about the incomes of four restaurants in a city in 2010 Summarise the information write at least 150 words v.2

The line graph below provides information about the incomes of four restaurants in a city in 2010
The line graph given illustrates in term of revenues of four different restaurants, namely Delicacy, Evening paradise, Grand Fiesta, and Spicy Fortune in a city over the course of 12 months, in 2010. In general, the income of Delicacy had an upward trend whereas there was an opposite pattern in the other restaurants. In January, the income of Delicacy hit the highest point with 160, 000 dollars while just only 100, 000 dollars of earning from Evening Paradise. Meanwhile, less popular was 50, 000 dollars of the income of Grand Fiesta which higher than this of Spicy Fortune by 20, 000 dollars. Over the year 2010, the figure for Delicacy saw a slight fluctuation in the revenue before dropping to 50, 000 dollars in December. By contrast, the income of the other locations was nearly volatile before keeping going on to rise in the next 2 months, 140, 000 dollars with Evening Paradise and 120, 000 dollars with Spicy Fortune, respectively. Moreover, the December of Grand Fiesta witnessed an overcome the income of the other restaurants and peak at 190, 000 dollars.
The line graph
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illustrates in term of revenues of four
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restaurants,
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Delicacy
, Evening paradise, Grand Fiesta, and Spicy Fortune in a city over the course of 12 months, in 2010.

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, the
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income
of
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Delicacy
had an upward trend whereas there was an opposite pattern in the other restaurants.

In January, the
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income
of
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Delicacy
hit the highest point with 160, 000
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dollars
while
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just
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only
100, 000
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dollars
of earning from Evening Paradise. Meanwhile, less popular was 50, 000
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dollars
of the
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income
of Grand Fiesta which higher than this of Spicy Fortune by 20, 000 dollars.

Over the year 2010, the figure for
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Delicacy
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saw
a slight fluctuation in the revenue
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before
dropping to 50, 000
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dollars
in December. By contrast, the
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income
of the other locations was
nearly
volatile
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before
keeping going on to rise in the
next
2 months, 140, 000
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dollars
with Evening Paradise and 120, 000
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dollars
with Spicy Fortune,
respectively
.
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, the December of Grand Fiesta witnessed
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an
overcome the
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income
of the other restaurants and peak at 190, 000
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dollars
.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS academic The line graph below provides information about the incomes of four restaurants in a city in 2010

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4 paragraphs
182 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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