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The graph below shows in percentage term the charging patterns of domestic access to modern technology in homes in the UK. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons where relevant v.1

The graph below shows in percentage term the charging patterns of domestic access to modern technology in homes in the UK.
The line graph illustrates the effect of modern technology appearing in families in the UK every couple of year from 1996/97 to 2002/03. In general, those equipment show a trend of increase, however, it can be separated by two stages, before 1998/99 and after this time. In the first stage, while the internet was not provided, computer, mobile phone or CD player have a slight increase from 1996 to 1999. Especially, CD player accounts almost families in this country by around 60%. Once the internet appears in 1998/99, it made everything change. The percentage of families can use internet increase sharply from almost 10% to around 40% during 4 years. By using the internet, the used mobile phone fluctuated wildly, but the trend was upward. Consequently, the mobile phone takes account of modern equipment as an important part with almost 65% and nearly reach to the CD player. While internet sharply climb and the home computer still remains the rate of development, the CD player began less and less us. It is noticeable that internet access strongly affected on the habit of electronic using from the past to the future.
The line graph illustrates the effect of modern technology appearing in families in the UK every couple of year
from 1996/97
to 2002/03.

In general
,
those equipment
show
a trend of increase,
however
, it can
be separated
by two stages,
before
1998/99 and after this time. In the
first
stage, while the internet was not provided, computer, mobile phone or CD
player
have a slight increase from 1996 to 1999.
Especially
, CD
player
accounts almost families in this country by around 60%. Once the internet appears in 1998/99, it made everything
change
. The percentage of families can
use
internet increase
sharply
from almost 10% to around 40% during 4 years. By using the internet, the
used
mobile phone fluctuated
wildly
,
but
the trend was upward.
Consequently
, the mobile phone takes account of modern equipment as an
important
part with almost 65% and
nearly
reach to the CD
player
. While internet
sharply
climb and the home computer
still
remains the rate of development, the CD
player
began less and less us.

It is noticeable that internet access
strongly
affected
on the habit of electronic using from the past to the future.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS academic The graph below shows in percentage term the charging patterns of domestic access to modern technology in homes in the UK.

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3 paragraphs
190 words
6.5
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