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2. The bar chart below shows the estimated sales of jeans for two companies next year in Turkey. The pie chart shows the projected market share of the two companies in jeans at the end of next year. v.1

2. The bar chart below shows the estimated sales of jeans for two companies next year in Turkey. The pie chart shows the projected market share of the two companies in jeans at the end of next year. v. 1
The bar chart illustrates the information jeans sales and the pie chart compares the part market sale of the two companies in two enterprises at the end of next year in Turkey. Overall, it is clear that the sales of jeans in Jack & Jones Co. will be higher than Mango Co. , however, the percentage of market share in Mango Co. will be bigger than Jack & Jones Co. In particular, on the one hand, sales of jeans by Mango will rise from 150, 000 pairs in January to about 500, 000 pairs in August, it overcomes the number of jeans will be sold by Jack & Jones at this time. Sales will be increased to over 600, 000 pairs in December. The number of jeans will be sold by Jack & Jones often witness higher than Mango on almost months in next year. Sales of jeans by Jack & Jones will growth from approximately 400, 000 pairs in January to 900, 000 pairs in December. The pie chart notice that, the percentage of Mango will highest, at 50 percent. This is followed by the percentage of Jack & Jones, at 30 percent. The third is other companies, at 20 percent in the next year.
The bar chart illustrates the information jeans
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sales
and the pie chart compares the part market
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sale
of the two
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companies
in two enterprises at the
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end
of
next
year in Turkey.
Overall
, it is
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clear
that the
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sales
of jeans in Jack
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&amp
;
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Jones
Co. will be higher than Mango Co.
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,
however
, the percentage of market share in Mango Co. will be bigger than Jack
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&amp
;
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Jones
Co.

In particular
, on the one hand,
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sales
of jeans by Mango will rise from 150, 000
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pairs
in January to about 500, 000
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pairs
in August, it overcomes the number of jeans will
be sold
by Jack
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&amp
;
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Jones
at this time.
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Sales
will
be increased
to over 600, 000
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pairs
in December. The number of jeans will
be sold
by Jack
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&amp
;
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Jones
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often
witness higher than Mango on almost months in
next
year.
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Sales
of jeans by Jack
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&amp
;
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Jones
will growth from approximately 400, 000
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pairs
in January to 900, 000
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pairs
in December. The pie chart notice that, the percentage of Mango will highest, at 50 percent. This
is followed
by the percentage of Jack
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&amp
;
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Jones
, at 30 percent. The third is other
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companies
, at 20 percent in the
next
year.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS academic 2. The bar chart below shows the estimated sales of jeans for two companies next year in Turkey. The pie chart shows the projected market share of the two companies in jeans at the end of next year. v. 1

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2 paragraphs
206 words
5.5
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