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The diagrams below show the design for a wind turbine and its location
The diagrams illustrate a wind turbine structure and it’s optimal location to generate more electricity form the wind. A wind turbine consists of a high steel tower where other parts are installed on it. Another part are very long blades, which are made by fiberglass or even wood. The generator as a important part is on the tower and produces about 1. 5 megawatts electricity. The computer measures speed and direction of wind via the wind sensors. As each of theses to parameters changes, direction and angels of blades would be changed respectively. Behind the turbine structure, the optimum locations are another factor, which affect the amount of produced electricity. In one hand wind strengths are not as fast as the high places in landscape, and in the other hand are not as slow as low level locations. So on the top of hills like other high level place are the best choices to install the wind turbines. In general, the technology and the palaces of locate are the two effective parameters to reach the more electricity via the wind.
The diagrams illustrate a
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turbine structure and
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it’s optimal location
to generate more
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electricity
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form
the wind.

A
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wind
turbine consists of a high steel tower where other parts
are installed
on it. Another part are
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very
long blades, which
are made
by fiberglass or even wood. The generator as
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a
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important
part is on the tower and produces about 1. 5 megawatts
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electricity
. The computer measures speed and direction of
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wind
via the
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wind
sensors. As each of theses to parameters
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changes
, direction and angels of blades would be
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changed
respectively
.

Behind the turbine structure, the optimum locations are another factor, which affect the amount of produced
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electricity
. In one hand
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wind
strengths are not as
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fast
as the high places in landscape, and in the other hand are not as slow as low level locations.
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So
on the top of hills like other high level place are the best choices to install the
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wind
turbines.

In general
, the technology and the palaces of locate are the two effective parameters to reach the more
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electricity
via the
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wind
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IELTS academic The diagrams below show the design for a wind turbine and its location

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4 paragraphs
180 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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