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The chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the year 1990 and 2010. v.6

The chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the year 1990 and 2010. v. 6
The chart represents the amount of money spent to charity in a percentage of different ages (18-25, 26-35, 36-50, 51-65 and over 65) in the UK from 1990 to 2010. Overall, a small proportion of British people had given money to charity compared to who had not given any. However, it is interesting to note that, the percentage of young aged people giving money to charity in the early period was higher than that of latter period, which was mainly given by seniors. Looking in details, the majority of money spent to charity was by younger generations; 36-50 (42%) and 26-35 (31%), while it was for lesser money spent for elders such as 51-65 people (35%) and over 65 aged people (30%) in 1990. In contrast, by 2010, the amount of money spent on charity opposed its trend where more money had gathered from seniors than that of juniors. In 2010, seniors spent 40% and 35% to charity by 51-65 age groups and over 65 age groups respectively. Meanwhile, juniors spent the lesser money compared with the corresponding period an earlier year, at 35% for 36-50 age groups, 24% for 26-35 group. In 2010, the percentage of money spent by teenagers on charity decreased by almost one-third (7%) compared with 1990 to 17%.
The chart represents the amount of
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in a percentage of
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(18-25, 26-35, 36-50, 51-65 and over 65) in the UK from 1990 to 2010.

Overall
, a
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small
proportion of British
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to
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compared to who had not
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giving
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in the early period was higher than that of latter period, which was
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given
by seniors.

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, the majority of
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was by younger generations; 36-50 (42%) and 26-35 (31%), while it was for lesser
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spent
for elders such as 51-65
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people
(35%) and over 65 aged
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people
(30%) in 1990.

In contrast
, by 2010, the amount of
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opposed its trend where more
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had gathered from seniors than that of juniors. In 2010, seniors
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40% and 35% to
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charity
by 51-65
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age
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groups
and over 65
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respectively
. Meanwhile, juniors
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the lesser
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compared with the corresponding period an earlier year, at 35% for 36-50
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age
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groups
, 24% for 26-35
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. In 2010, the percentage of
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teenagers
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charity
decreased by almost one-third (7%) compared with 1990 to 17%.
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IELTS academic The chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the year 1990 and 2010. v. 6

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