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The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960.

The maps illustrate the transformation of Queen Mary Hospital at three different stages in its development: 1960, 1980 and 2000. Overall, the hospital became more developed, making use some of the natural resources while extending the hospital scale and providing more options for treatment and medical education. From 1960 to 2000, there are many changes around Queen Mary Hospital. In 1980, a shopping centre in the left of the hospital was dissolved in order to construct two additional hospital building, namely a pharmacy which was located next to this hospital and a cancer centre which was to the left of a pharmacy. In the year 2000, the pharmacy unchanged, while the cancer center was enlarged about three times compared to in 1980. In the bottom left corner of the hospital, farmland was converted into the nursing school in the period from 1960 to 1980. However, in 2000, this school was occupied the entire area by the cancer centre. And then, is this year 2000, the car park, which was in the right of nursing school was divided into two parts so that it provided a smaller car park and a small nursing school.

IELTS academic You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons whe v.67

The maps illustrate the transformation of Queen Mary
Hospital
at three
different
stages in its development: 1960, 1980 and 2000.

Overall
, the
hospital
became more developed, making
use
some of the
natural resources while extending the
hospital
scale and providing more options for treatment and medical education.

From 1960 to 2000, there are
many
changes
around Queen Mary
Hospital
. In 1980, a shopping
centre
in the
left
of the
hospital
was dissolved
in order to construct two additional
hospital
building,
namely
a pharmacy which
was located
next
to this
hospital
and a cancer
centre
which was to the
left
of a pharmacy. In the year 2000, the pharmacy unchanged, while the cancer center
was enlarged
about three times compared to in 1980.

In
the bottom
left
corner of the
hospital
, farmland
was converted
into the nursing
school
in the period from 1960 to 1980.
However
, in 2000, this
school
was occupied
the entire area by the cancer
centre
. And then, is this year 2000, the car park, which was in the right of nursing
school
was divided
into two parts
so
that it provided a smaller car park and a
small
nursing
school
.
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