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Different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1950, 1970 and 1990 are discussed in the graph below. write a report for university lecturer describing the information in the bar chart. you should write at least 150 wor v.2

Different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1950, 1970 and 1990 are discussed in the graph below. write a report for university lecturer describing the information in the bar chart. you should write at least 150 wor v. 2
The vertical bar chart illustrates the information about in European city people use four different modes of transport to travel between 1950 and 1990. The data has been calibrated in percentage. At the first glance, it can be clearly seen that, The ratio of traveler used in initial year was highest on foot at 38 followed by bike at 27. Whereas, the lowest percentage of commuters can be reported for car at 5 and the second lowest percentile of traveler used bus at 17. Moving further, in 1970, there were almost same percentage of commuters used Bus, Car, Bikes and foot in the range of 22 and 26. Moreover, in 1990, the highest ratio of traveler can be witnessed for Car at around 40 While the percentage of commuters used Bike and Foot was lowest at almost 5 followed by bus at 15. Overall, in the last year, the most favorable mode of transport was Car and the less preferable vehicle was Bike.
The vertical bar chart illustrates the information about in European city
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in initial year was
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at 27. Whereas, the lowest percentage of commuters can
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car
at 5 and the second lowest percentile of traveler
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bus at 17.

Moving
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, in 1970, there were almost same percentage of commuters
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used
Bus,
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Car
,
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Bikes
and foot in the range of 22 and 26.
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, in 1990, the highest ratio of traveler can
be witnessed
for
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Car
at around 40 While the percentage of commuters
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used
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Bike
and Foot was lowest at almost 5 followed by bus at 15.

Overall
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Car
and the less preferable vehicle was
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Bike
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic Different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1950, 1970 and 1990 are discussed in the graph below. write a report for university lecturer describing the information in the bar chart. you should write at least 150 wor v. 2

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
163 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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