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The maps below show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960.

The diagram illustrate the development of Queen Mary Hospital from 1960 to 2000. In 1960 hospital was built beside Shopping Centre and Car Park. The largest area wa farmland. In 1980, Cancer Centre and Pharmacy replaced Shopping Centre. Beside the farmland disappeared and a nursing school was built at that area. In 2000, hospital and pharmacy building were unchanged while cancer centre were extended. Nursing school and car park became smaller a half. There were a lot of changes in hospital within 40 years. New buildings were built and extended, while some areas were disappeared and decreased size.

IELTS academic The maps below show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. v.2

The diagram
illustrate
the development of Queen Mary
Hospital
from 1960 to 2000. In 1960
hospital
was built
beside Shopping
Centre
and Car Park. The largest area
wa
farmland. In 1980, Cancer
Centre
and Pharmacy replaced Shopping
Centre
. Beside the farmland disappeared and a nursing school
was built
at that area. In 2000,
hospital
and pharmacy building
were unchanged
while cancer
centre
were extended
. Nursing school and car park became smaller a half. There were
a lot of
changes
in
hospital
within 40 years. New buildings
were built
and extended, while
some
areas
were disappeared
and decreased size.
0Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
Academic
5 paragraphs
98 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resources: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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