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The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

The first pie chart illustrates average energy usages in a typical Australian family while the second pie chart shows the percentage of greenhouse gas emission from this energy consumption. As is presented, water heating and heating & cooling consume the highest energy and they produce the highest percentage of greenhouse gas in Australia. According to the given data, water heating system consumed 23% of total energy consumption in an Australian household while heating and cooling system require 20% energy. Refrigeration consumed 12% energy which is larger than that of energy requirement for cooking and lighting. Finally, 5% energy is consumed in standby mode and the remaining 24% energy is required for all other household appliances. On the other hand, heating and cooling systems contribute to the highest percentage of greenhouse gas emission which is 38%. Water heaters, though require more energy than heating and cooling, emit comparatively lesser greenhouse gas (25%). These two systems produce the highest percentage of greenhouse gas in Australia. Cooking, lighting and refrigeration generate 18% greenhouse gas in total and all other appliances and standby mode generate 19% such gas.

IELTS academic You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting v.68

The
first
pie chart illustrates average energy usages in a typical Australian family while the second pie chart
shows
the percentage of greenhouse gas emission from this energy consumption. As
is presented
, water heating and heating
&amp
; cooling consume the highest
energy and
they produce the highest percentage of greenhouse gas in Australia. According to the
given
data, water heating system consumed 23% of total energy consumption in an Australian household while heating and cooling system require 20% energy. Refrigeration consumed 12% energy which is larger than that of energy requirement for cooking and lighting.
Finally
, 5% energy
is consumed
in standby mode and the remaining 24% energy
is required
for all other household appliances.
On the other hand
, heating and cooling systems contribute to the highest percentage of greenhouse gas emission which is 38%. Water heaters, though require more energy than heating and cooling, emit
comparatively
lesser greenhouse gas (25%). These two systems produce the highest percentage of greenhouse gas in Australia. Cooking, lighting and refrigeration generate 18% greenhouse gas in total and all other appliances and standby mode generate 19% such gas.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
54Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
3 paragraphs
184 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resources: 6.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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