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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting v.68

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.
The first pie chart illustrates average energy usages in a typical Australian family while the second pie chart shows the percentage of greenhouse gas emission from this energy consumption. As is presented, water heating and heating & cooling consume the highest energy and they produce the highest percentage of greenhouse gas in Australia. According to the given data, water heating system consumed 23% of total energy consumption in an Australian household while heating and cooling system require 20% energy. Refrigeration consumed 12% energy which is larger than that of energy requirement for cooking and lighting. Finally, 5% energy is consumed in standby mode and the remaining 24% energy is required for all other household appliances. On the other hand, heating and cooling systems contribute to the highest percentage of greenhouse gas emission which is 38%. Water heaters, though require more energy than heating and cooling, emit comparatively lesser greenhouse gas (25%). These two systems produce the highest percentage of greenhouse gas in Australia. Cooking, lighting and refrigeration generate 18% greenhouse gas in total and all other appliances and standby mode generate 19% such gas.
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usages in a typical Australian family while the second pie chart
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emission from this
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consumption. As
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consume the highest
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in Australia.

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data, water
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consumed 23% of total
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consumption in an Australian household while
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and
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require 20%
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. Refrigeration consumed 12%
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which is larger than that of
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requirement for cooking and lighting.
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, 5%
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is consumed
in standby mode and the remaining 24%
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is required
for all other household appliances.

On the other hand
,
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and
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contribute to the highest
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of
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emission which is 38%. Water heaters, though require more
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than
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and
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, emit
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(25%). These two
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produce the highest
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in Australia. Cooking, lighting and refrigeration generate 18%
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in total and all other appliances and standby mode generate 19% such
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.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
41Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS academic The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
184 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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