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The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant v.5

The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.
The table provides some details about date opened, kilometres of route and how many passengers per year use underground railway system in six metropolises. It is clearly that London was the first city who had an underground railway system opened in 1863. Moreover, it is the longest system in the world because the route of railway system has 394 km, but annually 775 millions of passengers use this kind of transport. After 39 years, Paris released their railway system which has 199 km transporting yearly 1191 million passengers, it seen is more used than London`s railway system. In terms of numbers of travellers, Tokyo`s metro system is smaller than London`s one, but in every year are transported 1927 million individuals almost double than Paris system. In contrast, the smallest underground railway system is from Kyoto having only 11 km used by 45 million of people annually. Not so far is the Los Angeles`s system with a length of 28 km, opened in 1981, after 4 years of the release of Washington`s railway system which serves 144 millions of passengers.
The table provides
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about date opened,
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of route and how
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many
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passengers
per
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year
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use
underground
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railway
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system
in six metropolises.

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that London was the
first
city who had an underground
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railway
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system
opened in 1863.
Moreover
, it is the longest
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system
in the world
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because
the route of
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railway
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system
has 394 km,
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but
annually
775
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millions
of
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passengers
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use
this kind of transport. After 39 years, Paris released their
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railway
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system
which has 199 km transporting yearly 1191
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million
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passengers
, it
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seen
is more
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used
than
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London`s
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railway
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system
. In terms of numbers of
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travellers
,
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metro
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system
is smaller than
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one,
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in every
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year
are transported
1927
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individuals almost double than Paris system.

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, the smallest underground
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railway
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system
is from Kyoto having
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only
11 km
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used
by 45
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million
of
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people
annually
. Not
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so
far is the Los
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system
with a length of 28 km, opened in 1981, after 4 years of the release of
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Washington`s
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railway
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system
which serves 144
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of
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4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS academic The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
179 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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