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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the v.58

The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the v. 58
The bar chart above indicates the proportions of spending for five chosen aspects in 4 countries USA, Canada, UK and Japan in 2009. Overall, the rate of expenditure in all 5 aspects fluctuated in one year but housing got the highest share of 4 countries and health care had the smallest one. As can be seen in the graph, housing, food and transportation were 3 categories that all 4 countries poured a lot of money on them. Specifically, housing ranked the first place with 25% of USA, 20% of Canada, 24% of UK and 23 % of Japan. Unlike in housing which USA spent the highest amount of money, in transportation Canada’s expenditure was the biggest and the runner up was USA. In food Japan and UK’ s spending around 20% while others leveled out at 15%. Healthcare and clothing were paid less than others by four countries. People in those nations only spent at the share of 5% in fashion and the health care had the similar case.
The bar chart above indicates the proportions of spending for five chosen aspects in 4
countries
USA, Canada, UK and Japan in 2009.

Overall
, the rate of expenditure in all 5 aspects fluctuated in one year
but
housing
got
the highest share of 4
countries
and health care had the smallest one.

As can be
seen
in the graph, housing, food and transportation were 3 categories that all 4
countries
poured
a lot of
money on them.
Specifically
, housing ranked the
first
place with 25%
of USA
, 20% of Canada, 24% of UK and 23 % of Japan. Unlike in housing which USA spent the highest amount of money, in transportation Canada’s expenditure was the biggest and the
runner up
was USA. In food Japan and UK’ s spending around 20% while others leveled out at 15%.

Healthcare and clothing
were paid
less than others by four
countries
.
People
in those nations
only
spent at the share of 5% in fashion and the health care had the similar case.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS academic The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the v. 58

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
169 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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