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The map below show a book store in 2000 and now Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant v.2

The map below show a book store in 2000 and now
The two maps illustrate a book store' s different structures in 2000 and now. In general, it can be seen that the book store has organised differently to adopt the new trend of combination of book and coffee shop. Particularly, the fiction area in the left of the book store, counted from the entrance in 2000 has been divided into four categories, art, hobbies, cookery and fiction at the present. Also, the fiction area next to that line changed into non-fiction. Directly from the entrance, there used to be three sections including art, hobbies, cookery, but now, there are only three coffee tables. The tables are placed nearly at the centre of the book store, which is convenient for the bookworms to sit down and enjoy the books. Opposite to those tables, a coffee bar is also installed instead of the non fiction section. Despite the change mentioned above, there still some remains the same. For example, the service desk still places at the right corner next to the entrance, just like in 2000, whereas the line of the new books, which is near the service desk, is just behind the entrance.
The two maps illustrate a
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different
structures in 2000 and
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now
.

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, it can be
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seen
that the
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book
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store
has
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organised
differently
to adopt the new trend of combination of
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book
and coffee shop.

Particularly
, the
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fiction
area in the
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left
of the
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book
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store
, counted from the
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entrance
in 2000 has
been divided
into four categories, art, hobbies, cookery and
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fiction
at the present.
Also
, the
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fiction
area
next
to that line
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changed
into non-fiction.
Directly
from the
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entrance
, there
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used
to be three sections including art, hobbies, cookery,
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but
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now
, there are
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only
three coffee tables. The tables
are placed
nearly
at the
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centre
of the
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book
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store
, which is convenient for the bookworms to sit down and enjoy the
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books
. Opposite to those tables, a coffee bar is
also
installed
instead
of the non
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fiction
section.

Despite the
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change
mentioned above, there
still
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some
remains the same.
For example
, the service desk
still
places at the right corner
next
to the
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entrance
,
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just
like in 2000, whereas the line of the new
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books
, which is near the service desk, is
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just
behind the
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entrance
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS academic The map below show a book store in 2000 and now

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
192 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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