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The bar chart belw shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009. v.2

The bar chart belw shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009. v. 2
The chart compares the cost paid for five aspects, including food, housing, transportation, health care, and clothing in 6 nations, United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in 2009. Overall, while the percentage of cost spent on housing and food were the highest, compared to other expenditures, the payment for health care and clothing accounted for a minority of rate. Look at the bar chart for more detail, it constituted of 26% on housing in United States, which was nearly twice as much as that of food, at 14%. The rate of expenditure on housing were relatively similar among four nations (United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan ), with 26%, 21%, 24%, 22% respectively. In terms of the cost spent on food, Japan topped the list with 23%, followed by the United Kingdom with 20%, and the last position belonged to United States with 14%. As can be seen in the chart, Canadian spend most income on transportation, with 20%. People in United States, the United Kingdom, and Japan paid at lower rates, with 17%, 15%, and 10%, respectively. Surprisingly, tt only costed below 7% for health care and clothing in all countries.
The chart compares the cost paid for five aspects, including
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, housing, transportation, health care, and clothing in 6 nations,
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, Canada, the
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Kingdom, and
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in 2009.

Overall
, while the percentage of cost spent on housing and
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were the highest, compared to other expenditures, the payment for health care and clothing accounted for a minority of rate.

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, which was
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, at 14%. The rate of expenditure on housing were
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, with 26%, 21%, 24%, 22%
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. In terms of the cost spent on
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,
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topped the list with 23%, followed by the
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Kingdom with 20%, and the last position belonged to
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with 14%.

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in the chart, Canadian spend most income on transportation, with 20%.
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, the
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paid at lower rates, with 17%, 15%, and 10%,
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.
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costed below 7% for health care and clothing in all countries.
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IELTS academic The bar chart belw shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009. v. 2

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