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The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009. v.1

The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009. v. 1
The bar graph compares how much Americans, Canadians, English and Japanese spent on food, housing, transportation, health care and clothing in 2009. Generally speaking, housing and food cost more to these nationalities than other expenses in this year. As is given in the column graph, Japanese spent around 23% money on food and this ratio was higher than that of other nationalities. UK residents’ spending on food was one-fifth of their total expenditure while it was less than 15% for the citizens of the USA and Canada. Housing on an average drained the highest percentages of money and it was more expensive in the United States as more than one-fourth of their money went on arranging accommodation. All other nationalities had to spend between 20% – 24% for housing. Transportation cost, on the other hand, was highest in Canada and one-fifth of spending by Canadians were for commuting. Japanese people spent the least on commuting and it was 10% or their expenses. Interestingly, these nationalities spent around 5% money on clothing which was slightly higher than that of their medical expenses. Us citizens had to spend the highest on health care which accounted for around 7% of their cost while it was the lowest in the UK.
The bar graph compares how much Americans, Canadians, English and Japanese
spent
on
food
, housing, transportation, health care and clothing in 2009.
Generally
speaking, housing and
food
cost more to these
nationalities
than
other
expenses in this year.

As is
given
in the column graph, Japanese
spent
around 23%
money
on
food
and this ratio was higher than that of
other
nationalities
.
UK residents
’ spending on
food
was one-fifth of their total expenditure while it was less than 15% for the citizens of the USA and Canada. Housing on an average drained the highest percentages of
money
and it was more expensive in the United States as more than one-fourth of their
money
went on arranging accommodation. All
other
nationalities
had to spend between 20%
24% for housing.

Transportation cost, on the
other
hand, was highest in Canada and one-fifth of spending by Canadians were for commuting. Japanese
people
spent
the least on commuting and it was 10% or their expenses.
Interestingly
, these
nationalities
spent
around 5%
money
on clothing which was
slightly
higher than that of their medical expenses. Us citizens had to spend the highest on health care which accounted for around 7% of their cost while it was the lowest in the UK.
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IELTS academic The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009. v. 1

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