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The graph compares the percentage of theinternational and the percentage of UK student gaining second class degrees or better at a major UK university v.2

The graph compares the percentage of theinternational and the percentage of UK student gaining second class degrees or better at a major UK university v. 2
The bar chart shows the proportion of international students and UK students in terms of achieving second class degrees and higher in seven different subJects at a University in the UK. In general terms, the chart shows that international and UK had different strengths when studying for degrees and better in this UK university. It is clear from the bar chart show that degree results were generally good for both international and UK students with over 50% gaining a second class degrees and better in all seven subjects except English literature and International Law. International students tended to do better than UK students in Electrical engineering and Information technology. Whereas over 80% of International students gained a good degree in IT, only about a half of UK students did so. Thr percentage of International and UK students who gained a good degree were similar for the two subjects in Nursing and Accountancy ( about 75% and 60% respectively). In Art history and Sociology subjects, UK students tended to do better. Especially, nearly three-quarter of UK students gained a second class degree or better in international Law while only a half of the International students achieved in this level.
The bar chart
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the proportion of
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international
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students
and UK
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students
in terms of achieving second
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class
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degrees
and higher in seven
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different
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subJects
at a University in the UK.

In general
terms, the chart
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shows
that
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international
and UK had
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different
strengths when studying for
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degrees
and
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better
in this UK university.

It is
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clear
from the bar chart
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show
that
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degree
results were
generally
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good
for both
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international
and UK
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students
with over 50% gaining a second
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class
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degrees
and
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better
in all seven
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subjects
except English literature and
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International
Law.
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International
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students
tended to do
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better
than UK
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students
in Electrical engineering and Information technology. Whereas over 80% of
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International
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students
gained a
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good
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degree
in IT,
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only
about a half of UK
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students
did
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so
.

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percentage of
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International
and UK
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students
who gained a
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good
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degree
were similar for the two
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subjects
in Nursing and Accountancy
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(
about 75% and 60%
respectively
). In Art history and Sociology
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subjects
, UK
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students
tended to do
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better
.
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,
nearly
three-quarter of UK
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students
gained a second
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class
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degree
or
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better
in
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international
Law while
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only
a half of the
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International
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students
achieved in this level.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
36Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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