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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The two graphs show the main sources of energy in the USA in the 1980s and the 1990s. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the changes which occurred. Write at least 150 words. v.44

The two graphs show the main sources of energy in the USA in the 1980s and the 1990s. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the changes which occurred. v. 44
The pie chart illustrates the energy production in the US from five different sources( oil, natural gas, coal, hydroelectric power and nuclear power ) in two different years 1980 and 1990. Overall, the large amounts of energy production for the United States of America was from oil in both the given years. While the least amount of energy was sourced from nuclear power in 1980 and the hydroelectric power in both 1980 and 1990. The amount of energy production by the oil was largest in the United States and accounted 42% in 1980 and then, the coal dramatically declined its output in 1990 yielding 33% only. The proportion of energy from hydroelectricity power, on the other hand, remained constant in both years 1980 and 1990 at a mere 5%. The energy generated from natural gas was a second largest source of energy which stood at 26% in 1980, while it declined slightly by only 1% in 1990. In contrast, the energy production by coal was at 22% in 1980 meanwhile, it increased by 5% in 1990. Similarly, there was a rise of 5% in the energy production by nuclear power from 5% in 1989 to 10% in 1990.
The pie chart illustrates the
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in the US from five
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different
sources
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(
oil, natural gas, coal, hydroelectric
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power
and nuclear
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power
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)
in two
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different
years 1980 and 1990.

Overall
, the large amounts of
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energy
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production
for the United States of America was from oil in both the
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given
years. While the least amount of
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energy
was sourced
from nuclear
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power
in 1980 and the hydroelectric
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power
in both 1980 and 1990.

The amount of
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energy
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production
by the oil was largest in the United States and accounted 42% in 1980 and then, the coal
dramatically
declined its output in 1990 yielding 33%
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only
. The proportion of
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energy
from hydroelectricity
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power
,
on the other hand
, remained constant in both years 1980 and 1990 at a mere 5%.
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The
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energy
generated from natural gas was a second largest source of
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energy
which stood at 26% in 1980, while it declined
slightly
by
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only
1% in 1990.

In contrast
, the
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energy
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production
by coal was at 22% in 1980 meanwhile, it increased by 5% in 1990.
Similarly
, there was a rise of 5% in the
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energy
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production
by nuclear
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power
from 5% in 1989 to 10% in 1990.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS academic The two graphs show the main sources of energy in the USA in the 1980s and the 1990s. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the changes which occurred. v. 44

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
198 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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