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The bar charts below show the Marriage and Divorce Statistics for eight countries in 1981 and 1994. Write a short report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. Write at least 150 words. v.3

The bar charts below show the Marriage and Divorce Statistics for eight countries in 1981 and 1994. Write a short report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. v. 3
The given bar charts compare the Marriage and Divorce data for eight nations in 1981 and 1994. Overall, it can be seen that while there was a downward trend in the marriage rate for 7 countries, Denmark saw an upward trend in marriages. As for divorce, the USA and Denmark experienced a fall in the number. Regarding the marriages, the USA stood at just over 10 per thousand people in 1981, followed by a sharp dip to about 9 in 1994. Despite dropping, both figures (10 and 9 per thousand people) were the highest total of the span. The remaining countries also exhibited similar falling trends that typically ranged from 1 to 3 per thousand people in 1994. However, there was a rapid swell from approximately 5 to 7 per thousand people from 1981 to 1994 in Denmark. The divorce rate was again surpassed by the USA, even though the figure dipped from 5. 5 to 4. 5 per thousand people (1981-1994). On the other hand, Italy had the least divorces at nearly zero. Although there was a negligible shrink in the divorce rate in Denmark, entire other nations witnessed a moderate climb over the period in the question. Interestingly, Germany plateaued at 2 per thousand people from 1981 to 1994.
The
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given
bar charts compare the
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Marriage
and
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Divorce
data for eight nations in 1981 and 1994.

Overall
, it can be
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seen
that while there was a downward trend in the
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marriage
rate for 7 countries, Denmark
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saw
an upward trend in
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marriages
. As for
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divorce
, the USA and Denmark experienced a fall in the number.

Regarding the
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marriages
, the USA stood at
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just
over 10 per thousand
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people
in 1981, followed by a sharp dip to about 9 in 1994. Despite dropping, both figures (10 and 9 per thousand
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people)
were the highest total of the span. The remaining countries
also
exhibited similar falling trends that
typically
ranged from 1 to 3 per thousand
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people
in 1994.
However
, there was a rapid swell from approximately 5 to 7 per thousand
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people
from 1981 to 1994 in Denmark.

The
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divorce
rate was again surpassed by the USA,
even though
the figure dipped from 5. 5 to 4. 5 per thousand
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people
(1981-1994).
On the other hand
, Italy had the least
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divorces
at
nearly
zero. Although there was a negligible shrink in the
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divorce
rate in Denmark, entire other nations witnessed a moderate climb over the period in the question.
Interestingly
, Germany plateaued at 2 per thousand
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people
from 1981 to 1994.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The bar charts below show the Marriage and Divorce Statistics for eight countries in 1981 and 1994. Write a short report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. v. 3

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
211 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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