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The first chat below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make compar v.1

The first chat below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.
The pie charts provides information on the proportion of average energy consumption in average Australian household and the percentage of greenhouse gas emissions as a result of these energy uses. Overall, if we looking at the first chart is that heating was the main type of energy usage at 42 %, while water heating was the type of energy which produced more greenhouse emissions at 32 %. Another main feature is that the cooling was the least precious type of energy in both pie charts at 2 % and 3 % respectively. To begin with, water heating was the second energy consumption at 30%, whereas other appliances consist only half of them. Then, next kinds of energy usage were refrigeration and lighting which former prevailed latter by 3 %. However, in second chart had some differences from first. There second type of greenhouse gas emissions in Australian house was other appliances at just over a quarter. Simultaneously, energy which consumed from heating and refrigeration were nearly similar at 15 % and 14 %, in turn. These energy types exceeded lighting approximately by 6 %.
The pie
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charts
provides information on the proportion of average
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energy
consumption in average Australian household and the percentage of greenhouse gas emissions
as a result
of these
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energy
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uses
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Overall
, if
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we looking
at the
first
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chart
is that
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heating
was the main
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type
of
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energy
usage at 42 %, while water
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heating
was the
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type
of
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energy
which produced more greenhouse emissions at 32 %. Another main feature is that the cooling was the least precious
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type
of
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energy
in both pie
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charts
at 2 % and 3 %
respectively
.

To
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begin
with, water
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heating
was the second
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energy
consumption at 30%, whereas other appliances consist
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only
half of them. Then,
next
kinds of
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energy
usage were refrigeration and lighting which former prevailed latter by 3 %.

However
, in second
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chart
had
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differences from
first
. There second
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type
of greenhouse gas emissions in Australian
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house
was other appliances at
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just
over a quarter.
Simultaneously
,
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energy
which consumed from
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heating
and refrigeration were
nearly
similar at 15 % and 14 %, in turn. These
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energy
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types
exceeded lighting approximately by 6 %.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS academic The first chat below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
184 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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