Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

The two graphs show the main sources of energy in the USA in the 1980s and the 1990s. v.2

The two graphs show the main sources of energy in the USA in the 1980s and the 1990s. v. 2
The given pie charts show data on the main energy sources in the United States of America in two decades. As is presented in the pie charts, oil was the main energy source for the USA both in the 80s and 90s but the use of oil and coal had reduced and their places as energy sources were somewhat replaced by the use of nuclear power in the USA. According to the given data, oil was the main energy source in the USA which was 42% in 1980. The second-largest energy source in this decade was the natural gas which supplied 26% of total energy in the same period. Then coal supplied more than 20 per cent energy demand in the USA while hydroelectric power and Nuclear power both supplied 5% of the total energy. In the next decade, Nuclear power produced one-tenth of total energy demand and that was almost double that it was in the previous decade. The hydroelectric power as an energy source remained unchanged as it provided 5% of total energy demand in this decade also. The two other main sources of energy in the USA remained almost unchanged in this decade and those two sources were Coal and Natural Gas. Finally, the use of oil as an energy source reduced to 33%, which is almost 10% less than the previous decade but remained the largest source albeit the reduction in this 90s decade.
The
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
pie charts
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
data on the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
main
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
energy
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sources
in the United States of America in two decades. As
is presented
in the pie charts,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
oil
was the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
main
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
energy
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
source
for the USA both in the 80s and 90s
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
oil
and coal had
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduced
and their places as
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
energy
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sources
were somewhat replaced by the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of nuclear
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
power
in the USA.

According to the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
data,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
oil
was the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
main
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
energy
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
source
in the USA which was 42% in 1980. The second-largest
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
energy
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
source
in this decade was the natural gas which supplied 26% of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
total
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
energy
in the same period. Then coal supplied more than 20 per cent
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
energy
demand in the USA while hydroelectric
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
power
and Nuclear
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
power
both supplied 5% of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
total
energy.

In the
next
decade, Nuclear
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
power
produced one-tenth of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
total
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
energy
demand and that was almost double that it was in the previous decade. The hydroelectric
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
power
as an
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
energy
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
source
remained unchanged as it provided 5% of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
total
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
energy
demand in this decade
also
. The two other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
main
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sources
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
energy
in the USA remained almost unchanged in this decade and those two
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sources
were Coal and Natural Gas.
Finally
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
oil
as an
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
energy
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
source
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduced
to 33%, which is almost 10% less than the previous decade
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
remained the largest
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
source
albeit the reduction in this 90s decade.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
39Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS academic The two graphs show the main sources of energy in the USA in the 1980s and the 1990s. v. 2

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
238 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts