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The pie graphs below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years. pie comparison v.2

The pie graphs below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years. pie comparison v. 2
The pie graphs compare the changes of five different energy productions between 1995 and 2005. Initially, the majority of energy productions in France were gas and coal, which took more than half of production of energy. While the rest of energy sources generated the least amount of energy in France and which producing proportion increased relatively except for Petro, which showed the declined in its production. About similar rates of energy were produced by Gas and Coal in both years, with the slight amount of coal was produced. Energy produced by coal comprised of 29. 80% in 1995 and this increased a slightly by about just 1% to 30. 93% in 2005. Similarly, 29. 63% of gas was generated in 1995 and which rose to 30. 31% by 2005. With the remaining energy sources, there was an approximately grow of 5% in nuclear and other from 6. 40% and 4. 90%, respectively in 1995, to reach at 10. 10% and 9. 10% in 2005. In contrast to this, the petrol was the only energy sources that decreased in its production from 29. 27% in 1995 to 19. 55% in 2005.
The pie graphs compare the
changes
of five
different
energy
productions
between 1995 and 2005.

Initially
, the majority of
energy
productions
in France
were
gas and coal, which took more than half of
production
of
energy
. While the rest of
energy
sources generated the least amount of
energy
in France and which producing proportion increased
relatively
except for
Petro
, which
showed
the declined in its production.

About similar rates of
energy
were produced
by Gas and Coal in both years, with the slight amount of coal
was produced
.
Energy
produced by coal comprised of 29. 80% in 1995 and this increased a
slightly
by about
just
1% to 30. 93% in 2005.
Similarly
, 29. 63% of gas
was generated
in 1995 and which rose to 30. 31% by 2005.

With the remaining
energy
sources, there was an approximately grow of 5% in nuclear and other from 6. 40% and 4. 90%,
respectively
in 1995, to reach at 10. 10% and 9. 10% in 2005.
In contrast
to this, the petrol was the
only
energy
sources that decreased in its
production
from 29. 27% in 1995 to 19. 55% in 2005.
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