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The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. You should write at least 150 words. Allow yourself 20 minutes v.9

The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. Allow yourself 20 minutes v. 9
The bar chart depicts the number of hours of leisure time spent by two different genders which are males and females with different employment status. The number of hours of leisure time is measured on weekly basis from 1998 to 1999. In overall, women had greater number of hours of leisure time than men. It is surprised to note that when both genders were in the same employment status, males had more time spent on leisure activities than females. This refers to the people who were employed full-time, unemployed, and retired. The other striking feature was that the categories of unemployed and retired had the same amount of leisure time in which the men was having around 90 hours while the women was having roughly 70 hours per week. As for the employed full-time category, males had 50 hours of free time whereas women had less than 40 hours of leisure time. The leisure time of employed full-time category was merely a half of the leisure time of unemployed and retired categories. The other two categories of employment status were divided into employed part-time and housewives. It is amazed to note that men had zero leisure time in these two categories. On the other hand, housewives who were females had more leisure time than females who were employed as part-time workers. The number of hours spent on leisure activities by these two categories were approximately 50 hours and 40 hours respectively.
The bar chart depicts the
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is measured
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In
overall
, women had greater
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hours
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leisure
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than
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men
. It
is surprised
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spent on
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leisure
activities than
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females
. This refers to the
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people
who were
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employed
full-time, unemployed, and retired. The other striking feature was that the
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categories
of unemployed and retired had the same amount of
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leisure
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time
in which the
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having around 90
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while the women was having roughly 70
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full-time
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category
, males had 50
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of free
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whereas women had less than 40
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. The
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was
merely
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of unemployed and retired categories.

The other two
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of employment status
were divided
into
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employed
part-time and housewives. It
is amazed
to note that
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men
had zero
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leisure
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time
in these two
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categories
.
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, housewives who were
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females
had more
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leisure
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time
than
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females
who were
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employed
as part-time workers. The
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activities by these two
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categories
were approximately 50
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hours
and 40
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hours
respectively
.
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IELTS academic The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. Allow yourself 20 minutes v. 9

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
241 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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