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The two graphs show the main sources of energy in the USA in the 1980s and the 1990s, write a report to describe the changes occurred. v.2

The two graphs show the main sources of energy in the USA in the 1980s and the 1990s, write a report to describe the changes occurred. v. 2
The pie charts compared the proportions of power sources falling into 5 distinct groups in the USA from 1980 to 1990. It is clear that oil remained the major source of energy through the 10-year period while the percentage of hydroelectric power stayed the lowest. In 1980, the oil segment counted for 42% of total power consumption but lost 9% share during the following decade, dropping dramatically to 33% by 1990. Meanwhile, natural gas and hydroelectric power were stable through 1980 to 1990, with the former category only saw a dip by 1% and reached to 25% later in 1990. In contrast, as can be seen in the same period, percentage of nuclear power jumped from a mere 5% to 10%, which doubled its proportion of overall energy consumption. Turning to another important trend, the coal segment grew by 5% during the decade. This was 6% lower than the proportion of oil and 2% higher than that of natural gas, making it the second largest group of energy source.
The pie charts compared the proportions of
power
sources falling into 5 distinct groups in the USA from 1980 to 1990.

It is
clear
that oil remained the major source of energy through the 10-year period while the percentage of hydroelectric
power
stayed the lowest.

In 1980, the oil segment counted for 42% of total
power
consumption
but
lost 9% share during the following decade, dropping
dramatically
to 33% by 1990. Meanwhile, natural gas and hydroelectric
power
were stable through 1980 to 1990, with the former category
only
saw
a dip by 1% and reached to 25% later in 1990.

In contrast
, as can be
seen
in the same period, percentage of nuclear
power
jumped from a mere 5% to 10%, which doubled its proportion of
overall
energy consumption. Turning to another
important
trend, the coal segment grew by 5% during the decade. This was 6% lower than the proportion of oil and 2% higher than that of natural gas, making it the second largest group of energy source.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS academic The two graphs show the main sources of energy in the USA in the 1980s and the 1990s, write a report to describe the changes occurred. v. 2

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
169 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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