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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart shows the monthly spending in dollars of a family in the USA on three items in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Wri v.41

The bar chart shows the monthly spending in dollars of a family in the USA on three items in 2010.
The bar chart illustrates the monthly expenditures on food, gas and clothing of a household in the USA in 2010. Overall what stands out from the chart is that the amount of spendings fluctuated in the given year as mentioned in the question. To begin, the most money was spent on food in January at around $ 500. Even though the rate of expenditure increased gradually in the following month, there was a significant drop to approximately $ 300, which constituted the least spending among all other items for the month of April. With regard to gas, it showed an opposite trend compared to food. Having remained fluctuated for first three months, the final month witnessed a marked rise to just under $ 600 as opposed to nearly $ 350 at the beginning of a month. Now, turning to clothing, it began at just over $ 200, making it the lowest expenditure in January. However, in the following month, the family spent the same amount as the gas around $ 550 that was more than double of the investment of a starting month. But, the figure fell considerably in March followed by a sharp rise in the final month to about 650 dollars.
The bar chart illustrates the monthly expenditures on food, gas and clothing of a household in the USA in 2010.
Overall
what stands out from the chart is that the amount of
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spendings
fluctuated in the
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given
year as mentioned in the question.

To
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begin
, the most money
was spent
on food in January at around
The currency mark is usually written without any whitespace: "$500".
$ 500
.
Even though
the rate of expenditure increased
gradually
in the following
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month
, there was a significant drop to approximately
The currency mark is usually written without any whitespace: "$300".
$ 300
, which constituted the least spending among all other items for the
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month
of April.

With regard to gas, it
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showed
an opposite trend compared to food. Having remained fluctuated for
first
three
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months
, the final
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month
witnessed a marked rise to
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just
under
The currency mark is usually written without any whitespace: "$600".
$ 600
as opposed to
nearly
The currency mark is usually written without any whitespace: "$350".
$ 350
at the beginning of a
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month
.
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Now
, turning to clothing, it began at
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just
over
The currency mark is usually written without any whitespace: "$200".
$ 200
, making it the lowest expenditure in January.
However
, in the following
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month
, the family spent the same amount as the gas around
The currency mark is usually written without any whitespace: "$550".
$ 550
that was more than double of the investment of a starting
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month
.
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But
, the figure fell
considerably
in March followed by a sharp rise in the final
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month
to about 650 dollars.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS academic The bar chart shows the monthly spending in dollars of a family in the USA on three items in 2010.

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
203 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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