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The bar chart shows the annual sales and profits of ABC Electronics in millions of US dollars over the period 1991 to 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at l v.1

The bar chart shows the annual sales and profits of ABC Electronics in millions of US dollars over the period 1991 to 2000.
The given bar chart compares the amount of sales and profits in ABS Electronics over 10 years through 1991 to 2000. The numbers are expressed in millions of US dollars. As it is obvious, a considerable quantities of sales experienced in contrast by a small amount of earnings over the whole years. The annual takings stayed approximately similar level about under 20, over the 10 years. The maximum turnover referred to 1997, reached to 16 million. In comparison to it, the selling amount was really much more. In 1991 and 1992, the selling had the same amount 100 million. After 2 years, the trading slightly increases to 112 million dollars. A dramatic improvement in selling continued until it reached to 135 in 1995. The sales gradually went up over 1997 to 1998, arriving to 149, 152 million respectively until in 1999 peaked at highest amount 158 million. However, it declined to 154 million in 2000.
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given
bar chart compares the
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amount
of sales and profits in ABS Electronics
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over
10 years through 1991 to 2000. The numbers
are expressed
in
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millions
of US dollars.

As it is obvious, a considerable
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quantities
of sales experienced
in contrast
by a
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small
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amount
of earnings
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over
the whole years.

The annual takings stayed approximately similar level about under 20,
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over
the 10 years. The maximum turnover referred to 1997, reached to 16
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million
.
In comparison
to it, the selling
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amount
was
really
much more. In 1991 and 1992, the selling had the same
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amount
100
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million
. After 2 years, the trading
slightly
increases to 112
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million
dollars. A dramatic improvement in selling continued until it reached to 135 in 1995. The sales
gradually
went up
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over
1997 to 1998, arriving to 149, 152
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million
respectively
until in 1999 peaked at highest
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amount
158
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million
.
However
, it declined to 154
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million
in 2000.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS academic The bar chart shows the annual sales and profits of ABC Electronics in millions of US dollars over the period 1991 to 2000.

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
155 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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