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The maps below show the layout of James Park in 2017 and the proposed changes to the park in 2027.

The maps show the changes that are going to happen in James Park for 2027. Nowadays, the park has four main attractions. These are a fountain, a toddler playground, a science center and a main playground. With the renovation, the park will have more pedestrian path and others new buildings. Even those, the statue will continue being the central attraction in the middle of the park. The renovation includes to resize the science center, which will be twice than now. Also, the toddler playground is going to convert in a theatre. In the left side of the map, bellow the path, is the playground area that will continue in the same place but behind of it, will be built a gymnasium. On the opposite of the map, the right up side, is the fountain that will be replaced by a garden. Overall, all these renovations are for keep the attention of the visitors which are scheme in 20 thousand per month by 2027.

IELTS academic The maps below show the layout of James Park in 2017 and the proposed changes to the park in 2027. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words v.2

The maps
show
the
changes
that are going to happen in James Park for 2027. Nowadays, the park has four main attractions. These are a fountain, a toddler playground, a science center and a main playground. With the renovation, the park will have more pedestrian path
and others
new buildings. Even those, the statue will continue being the central attraction in the middle of the park. The renovation includes to resize the science center, which will be
twice
than
now
.
Also
, the toddler playground is going to convert in a
theatre
. In the
left
side of the map, bellow the path, is the playground area that will continue in the same place
but
behind of it, will
be built
a gymnasium. On the opposite of the map, the right up side, is the fountain that will
be replaced
by a garden.
Overall
, all these renovations are for
keep
the attention of the visitors which are scheme in 20 thousand per month by 2027.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
Academic
6 paragraphs
163 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resources: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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  • Band score ≤ 6
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