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You live in a room in college which you share with another student. You find it very difficult to work there because he or she always has friends visiting. They have parties in the room and sometimes borrow your things without asking you. Write a letter to v.6

You live in a room in college which you share with another student. You find it very difficult to work there because he or she always has friends visiting. They have parties in the room and sometimes borrow your things without asking you. Write a letter to v. 6
Dear Sir, I am writing to inform you that I wish to move to new accommodation in the next semester, preferably a single room as I found my current arrangements too inconvenient. My roommate has made it very harder for me to concentrate on my studies and I hope you will help me sort it out. Let me explain to you my problem, I am doing MBA final year sharing a room with a classmate, but his behaviors are too inconsiderate. He has his friends visiting him every single day, staying till early morning. The worst part is, they play loud music throughout the night and partying in the room wildly. In addition to this, he borrows my study materials and other personal belongings without my permission only to misplace them somewhere. One such instance happened in the last week when he borrowed the books that I have taken from the college library and lost it. I hope you will understand my current situation and considering the above reasons I would request you to help me in shifting to a new individual space in the university hostel. Thank you for understanding. Your' s faithfully, Akilan Palaniappan
Dear Sir,

I am writing to inform you that I wish to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
to new accommodation in the
next
semester,
preferably
a single room as I found my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
arrangements too inconvenient. My roommate has made it
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very
harder for me to concentrate on my studies and I hope you will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
me sort it out.

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Let
me
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explain
to you my problem, I am doing MBA final year sharing a room with a classmate,
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but
his behaviors are too inconsiderate. He has his friends visiting him every single day, staying till early morning. The worst part is, they play loud music throughout the night and partying in the room
wildly
.

In addition
to this, he borrows my study materials and other personal belongings without my permission
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
to misplace them somewhere. One such instance happened in the last week when he borrowed the books that I have taken from the college library and lost it.

I hope you will understand my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
situation and considering the above reasons I would request you to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
me in shifting to a new individual space in the university hostel.

Thank you for understanding.

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2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS academic You live in a room in college which you share with another student. You find it very difficult to work there because he or she always has friends visiting. They have parties in the room and sometimes borrow your things without asking you. Write a letter to v. 6

Academic
  American English
8 paragraphs
195 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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