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You have lost your student identification card. This has created some problems for you. Write a letter to the director of student services. In your letter•advise them of your situation•explain how this is affecting you•request a new card v.2

You have lost your student identification card. This has created some problems for you. Write a letter to the director of student services. In your letter•advise them of your situation•explain how this is affecting you•request a new card v. 2
Dear sir or madam, I am Harry Martin, student of your prestigious institution, pursuing BACHELOR' S OF COMPUTER SCIENCE having roll number 0123456. Unfortunately, last week pickpocket had stolen my wallet that includes many essential cards including my student identity card. I am writing this letter to request you to issue me a new card. Actually, I commute by local bus from college to school and last friday, when I reached home, I realised that someone has stolen my wallet. I immediately reported about the same at the nearest police station. As I lost my student ID card, I am unable to access the college library that is badly affecting my studies. Further, I am not able to obtain student bus pass because of no student id proof. I request you to issue me a new card as soon as possible so that I can study well for my exams and also get a new bus pass that saves a lot of coveyance charges. For your reference, I enclosed a copy of police report that I registered. Looking forward for a positive revert from you soon. Yours Sincerely Harry Martin.
Dear sir or madam,

I am Harry Martin,
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student
of your prestigious institution, pursuing
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BACHELOR&
#039; S OF COMPUTER SCIENCE having roll number 0123456. Unfortunately, last week pickpocket had stolen my wallet that includes
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many
essential
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cards
including my
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student
identity
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card
. I am writing this letter to request you to issue me a new card.

Actually, I commute by local bus from college to school and last
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friday
, when I reached home, I
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realised
that someone has stolen my wallet. I immediately reported about the same at the nearest police station. As I lost my
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student
ID
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card
, I am unable to access the college library
that is
badly
affecting my studies.
Further
, I am not able to obtain
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student
bus pass
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because
of no
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student
id proof.

I request you to issue me a new
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card
as
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soon
as possible
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so
that I can study well for my exams and
also
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get
a new bus pass that saves
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a lot of
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coveyance
charges. For your reference, I enclosed a copy of police report that I registered.

Looking forward for a
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positive
revert from you
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soon
.

Yours
Sincerely


Harry Martin.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS academic You have lost your student identification card. This has created some problems for you. Write a letter to the director of student services. In your letter•advise them of your situation•explain how this is affecting you•request a new card v. 2

Academic
  American English
7 paragraphs
190 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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