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The table displays the average monthly rainfall for the year in five cities of the world. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.2

The table displays the average monthly rainfall for the year in five cities of the world.
The table compares the mean precipitation of a month in Hong Kong, Tokyo, Jakarta, Cairo, and London for a year. Overall, Hong Kong has the maximum rainfall where Cairo has the least. Most of the cities have the highest rainfall in the middle of the year. According to the table, for the first six months, rainfall is in increasing order for Hong Kong, Tokyo, and Jakarta but Cairo and London have reverse order. The Jakarta has 300mm of rainfall in January which is followed by London with 80mm, Tokyo with 48mm, Hong Kong contains 24mm and the least precipitation in Cairo of 7mm. For the next following months, the rainfall in Hong Kong and Tokyo rises gradually but the other three cities have a decline. Again for the second half, In August the rainfall grow up by 354mm than January in Hong Kong, which is the highest throughout the period, and slumping down for rest months in Hong Kong and Tokyo. In contrast, in Jakarta and London rain amount is constantly growing till the end of the year but Cairo has no rainfall from September to December. By the end, Jakarta has the highest rainfall of 210mm where other cities have under 80mm.
The table compares the mean precipitation of a
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month
in Hong Kong, Tokyo, Jakarta, Cairo, and London for a year.

Overall
, Hong Kong has the maximum
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rainfall
where Cairo has the least. Most of the cities have the highest
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rainfall
in the middle of the year.

According to the table, for the
first
six
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months
,
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rainfall
is in increasing order for Hong Kong, Tokyo, and Jakarta
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but
Cairo and London have reverse order. The Jakarta has
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300mm
of
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rainfall
in January which
is followed
by London with
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80mm
, Tokyo with
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48mm
, Hong Kong contains
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24mm
and the least precipitation in Cairo of
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7mm
. For the
next
following
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months
, the
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rainfall
in Hong Kong and Tokyo rises
gradually
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but
the other three cities have a decline.

Again for the second half, In August the
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rainfall
grow up by
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354mm
than January in Hong Kong, which is the highest throughout the period, and slumping down for rest
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months
in Hong Kong and Tokyo.
In contrast
, in Jakarta and London rain amount is
constantly
growing till the
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end
of the year
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but
Cairo has no
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rainfall
from September to December. By the
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end
, Jakarta has the highest
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rainfall
of
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210mm
where other cities have under
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80mm
.
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IELTS academic The table displays the average monthly rainfall for the year in five cities of the world.

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4 paragraphs
203 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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