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An English speaking friend wants to spend a two week holiday in your region and has written asking for information and advice Write a letter to your friend In your letter offer to find somewhere to staygive advice about what to dogive information about v.8

An English speaking friend wants to spend a two week holiday in your region and has written asking for information and advice Write a letter to your friend In your letter offer to find somewhere to staygive advice about what to dogive information about v. 8
Hello Suresh, I got your message about your plan to visit Mumbai on 2 weeks trip. Therefore, I am writing this letter to provide you some suggestions which can help you to plan your trip more efficiently. First of all, when I came to know about your trip, I felt very happy and excited. I cannot wait more to receive you here at the Airport. In this letter I am giving you some advices on your questions that you have asked me in your last letter. Firstly, for your accommodation, I am sending you the list of famous hotels which are popular here for their hospitality. All hotels are located at the center of the city and can be easily accessible. Secondly, as you know Mumbai is very large city and to visit all well-known places you at least require one week time. I suggest you to take Mumbai Darshan tourist service which is very popular here and has unique trip plan which includes all the famous places. Thirdly, I prefer you should bring some warm clothes with you because winter has already begun here and you may need to face freezing temperature. I hope that these suggestions help you to schedule your trip more easily. Please let me know about your flight and trip timings so that I can also save some time for you and we can spent some quality time together. Best wishes, Pratik Patel
Hello Suresh,

I
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your message about your plan to visit Mumbai on 2 weeks
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trip
.
Therefore
, I am writing this letter to provide you
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some
suggestions which can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
you to plan your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trip
more
efficiently
.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, when I came to know about your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trip
, I felt
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
happy and excited. I cannot wait more to receive you here at the Airport. In this letter I am giving you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
advices on your questions that you have asked me in your last letter.
Firstly
, for your accommodation, I am sending you the list of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
famous
hotels which are popular here for their hospitality. All hotels
are located
at the center of the city and can be
easily
accessible.
Secondly
, as you know Mumbai is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
large city and to visit all well-known places you at least require one week time. I suggest you to take Mumbai
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Darshan
tourist service which is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
popular here and has unique
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trip
plan which includes all the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
famous
places.
Thirdly
, I prefer you should bring
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
warm clothes with you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
winter has already begun here and you may need to face freezing temperature.

I hope that these suggestions
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
you to schedule your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trip
more
easily
.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Please
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
me know about your flight and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trip
timings
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that I can
also
save
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
time for you and we can
The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: "spend"
spent
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
quality time together.

Best wishes,

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Pratik
Patel
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
6Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS academic An English speaking friend wants to spend a two week holiday in your region and has written asking for information and advice Write a letter to your friend In your letter offer to find somewhere to staygive advice about what to dogive information about v. 8

Academic
  American English
6 paragraphs
237 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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