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You have seen an advertisement in an English newspaper for a job working in the City Museum shop during the holidays. You decide to apply for the job. Write a letter to the director of the Museum. In your letter: •introduce yourself•explain what experie v.10

You have seen an advertisement in an English newspaper for a job working in the City Museum shop during the holidays. You decide to apply for the job. Write a letter to the director of the Museum. In your letter: •introduce yourself•explain what experie v. 10
Dear Sir/ Madam, I am writing this letter to apply for holiday job posting which has been advertised in daily Newspaper. I am a 24-year-old student, studying my bachelor degree in Cambridge University. Though I am from one of the South East countries, I do speak English fluently. At present, I am very keen to have a holiday job this summer. My term finishes on 5 July and I am free until 20 September. Last year I had worked in a restaurant as a servant and I got a chance to meet the people all over the world. That was a fascinating experience. This year I would like to expand my wings, looking have a more interesting and satisfying job. I would say, working in a museum might give a chance for me to explore more about the history and meet the different ethnic groups. I enjoy going into the museums and am particularly keen on history. I have been in your museum several times and I am familiar with the historical objects and Heritage of the museum. I do hope you will be interested in my application. I look forward to hearing from you in the near future. Yours faithfully, Dimitris Boudramis
Dear Sir/ Madam,

I am writing this letter to apply for holiday job posting which has
been advertised
in daily Newspaper. I am a 24-year-
old
student, studying my bachelor degree in Cambridge University. Though I am from one of the South East countries, I do speak English
fluently
. At present, I am
very
keen to have a holiday job this summer.

My term finishes on 5
July and
I am free until 20 September. Last year I had worked in a restaurant as a servant and I
got
a chance to
meet
the
people
all over the world. That was a fascinating experience. This year I would like to expand my wings, looking have a more interesting and satisfying job. I would say, working in a
museum
might give a chance for me to explore more about the history and
meet
the
different
ethnic groups.

I enjoy going into the
museums
and am
particularly
keen on history.
I
have been in your
museum
several
times and
I am familiar with the historical objects and Heritage of the
museum
.
I
do hope you will
be interested
in my application.

I
look forward to hearing from you in the near future.

Yours
faithfully
,

Dimitris
Boudramis
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS academic You have seen an advertisement in an English newspaper for a job working in the City Museum shop during the holidays. You decide to apply for the job. Write a letter to the director of the Museum. In your letter: •introduce yourself•explain what experie v. 10

Academic
  American English
7 paragraphs
202 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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