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You have seen an advertisement for weekend work in a hotel in the town where you are staying. You have worked in a hotel before and think that the job would be suitable for you. You must apply in writing. Write a letter to the hotel manager expressing you v.2

You have seen an advertisement for weekend work in a hotel in the town where you are staying. You have worked in a hotel before and think that the job would be suitable for you. You must apply in writing. Write a letter to the hotel manager expressing you v. 2
Dear Sir/Madam, This is in relation to the advertisement that posted in “Times of India” newspaper dated 21st May 2016. This advertisement was for the Supervisor position for the event this weekend. My name is XYZ and is having experience in hospitality industry as I was a Guest Relation Associate. I am a management student majoring up in Operational Management from Mumbai University. I am waiting for my final year results, as I have last month. During my studies in the University, I used to work part time in a renowned Hotel as a Guest Relation Associate. Here my duties were to manage the reception area and adhere to the issues the customer would address. This job helped me to sharpen my skills like managing staffs, interacting with customer, cater to the needs to the needs of the customer and lastly ensure the customer have a good experience by providing prompt services. I have been working in this position for the past 2 years and have got good experience in the hospitality industry. Therefore, I could be an ideal candidate for this position. I would like to know what the job responsibilities required for this position as I wanted to check if the skills required add up to the job I intend to do in future. Waiting for a positive reply, Your Sincerely XYZ
Dear Sir/Madam,

This is in relation to the advertisement that posted in “Times of India” newspaper dated 21st May 2016. This advertisement was for the Supervisor position for the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
event
this weekend.

My name is XYZ and is having experience in hospitality industry as I was a Guest Relation Associate. I am a management student majoring up in Operational Management from Mumbai University. I am waiting for my final year results, as I have
‘last month’ indicates a finished event of the past. Please check the predicate's tense.
last month
.

During my studies in the University, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
to work
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
part time
in a renowned Hotel as a Guest Relation Associate. Here my duties were to manage the reception area and adhere to the issues the
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customer
would address. This job
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helped
me to sharpen my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
like managing staffs, interacting with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
customer
, cater to the needs to the needs of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
customer
and
lastly
ensure the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
customer
have a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
experience by providing prompt services. I have been working in this position for the past 2 years and have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
experience in the hospitality industry.
Therefore
, I could be an ideal candidate for this position.

I would like to know what the job responsibilities required for this position as I wanted to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
check
if the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
required
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
add
up to the job I intend to do
Did you mean: "in the future"?
in future
.

Waiting for a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
reply,

Your
Sincerely


XYZ
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS academic You have seen an advertisement for weekend work in a hotel in the town where you are staying. You have worked in a hotel before and think that the job would be suitable for you. You must apply in writing. Write a letter to the hotel manager expressing you v. 2

Academic
  American English
8 paragraphs
223 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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