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The chart below gives information about Southeland's main exports in 2005, now, and future projections for 2025. v.2

The chart below gives information about Southeland's main exports in 2005, now, and future projections for 2025. v. 2
This bar chart illustrates the performance of Southland’s primary experts in 2000 and 2019. It also indicates future projections for 2025. According to the data, it seems likely that international tourism will become the dominant industry on those dairy export will remain strong. In 2000, we can see that tourism was the greatest exports earner of the three industries, with revenue standing at just over 8 billion. This figure has increased slightly, so that now, in 2019, it has reached almost 9 billion. It is estimated that international tourism will continue to grow, so that by 2025, it will be earning around 7 billion for the country. In 2000, dairy exports were worth around 7 billion, but since then there has been a dramatic increase, and sales for this year are approximately 10 billion. Experts are predicting that exports in this area may fall slightly, so a figure of 9. 5 billion is expected for 2025. Meat products are the third key industry in Southland, but sales have dropped since 2000 and now stand at 5. 5 billion. It is expected that sales will continue to decrease in the future.
This bar chart illustrates the performance of Southland’s primary experts in 2000 and 2019. It
also
indicates future projections for 2025.

According to the data, it seems likely that international tourism will become the dominant industry on
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will remain strong.

In 2000, we can
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that tourism was the greatest
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earner of the three industries, with revenue standing at
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. This figure has increased
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, in 2019, it has reached almost 9
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that international tourism will continue to grow,
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that by 2025, it will be earning around 7
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for the country. In 2000, dairy
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were worth around 7
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,
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since then there has been a dramatic increase, and sales for this year are approximately 10
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. Experts are predicting that
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in this area may fall
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a figure of 9. 5
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for 2025.

Meat products are the third key industry in Southland,
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sales have dropped since 2000 and
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stand at 5. 5
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that sales will continue to decrease in the future.
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IELTS academic The chart below gives information about Southeland's main exports in 2005, now, and future projections for 2025. v. 2

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