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The first below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons v.2

The first below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.
The two pie charts not only show the proportions of energy consumed by Australian household, but also reveal the greenhouse gas emitted by different kinds of energy use. Overall, it is obvious that the greatest consumption of energy is taken up by heating, while the maximum emission of greenhouse gas results from water heating. In terms of the breakdown of household energy consumption, heating and water heating rank number one and two compared with other usages: 42% and 30% respectively. By comparison, the figures for refrigeration (7%), cooling (2%) and lighting (4%) remains relatively insignificant. Not mentioned is the percentage taken up by other appliances, which contributes 15% of the whole energy use. As to the greenhouse gas discharged by different use, the greatest sector is the combination of heating (15%) and water heating (32%), which is corresponding to the pie chart for energy use. However, other appliances also account significant proportion with 28% only 4% less than water heating. Last but not least, the greenhouse gas emitted by cooling (3%), lighting (8%) and refrigeration (14%) was also the minimum in comparison with other household methods.
The two pie charts not
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emitted by
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, it is obvious that the greatest consumption of
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is taken
up by
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heating
, while the maximum emission of
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greenhouse
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gas
results from
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heating.

In terms of the breakdown of household
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energy
consumption,
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heating
and
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water
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heating
rank number one and two compared with
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other
usages: 42% and 30%
respectively
. By comparison, the figures for refrigeration (7%), cooling (2%) and lighting (4%) remains
relatively
insignificant. Not mentioned is the percentage taken up by
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other
appliances, which contributes 15% of the whole
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energy
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use
.

As to the
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greenhouse
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gas
discharged by
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different
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use
, the greatest sector is the combination of
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heating
(15%) and
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water
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heating
(32%), which is corresponding to the pie chart for
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energy
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use
.
However
,
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other
appliances
also
account significant proportion with 28%
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only
4% less than
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water
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heating
. Last
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but
not least, the
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greenhouse
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emitted by cooling (3%), lighting (8%) and refrigeration (14%) was
also
the minimum
in comparison
with
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other
household methods.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The first below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
186 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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