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The chart of marriages and divorces rates in US between 1970 and 2000 and the marital status of adult American in the same period. v.2

The chart of marriages and divorces rates in US between 1970 and 2000 and the marital status of adult American in the same period. v. 2
The two figures show rates of marriages and divorces in America from 1970 to 2000, and the states of marriage of American adults in two different years 1970 and 2000. It is clear that there was a decline in the marriage rates, while the divorce people remained unchanged over the survey period. In the second chart, married group is the major proportion, whereas widowed and divorced people are the minority groups. In 1970, the number of marriage people is 2. 5 million. This is the largest number in both groups, and it maintained that rate until 1980, before reducing to only 2 million in the end of the period. The divorces have smaller rates of people than married people, with only 1million in 1970. Although, there was slight increase in 1980, by 0. 4 million, the number of divorced people returned to the starting point in two last years. Moving to marital status part, the highest percentage is the part of people who are married in 1970, at 70%, then fell to just under 60% in 2000. In contrast, both parts of widowed and divorced people are lowest parts with all of them are below 10% throughout the period.
The two figures
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of
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marriages
and divorces in America from 1970 to 2000, and the states of
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marriage
of American adults in two
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different
years 1970 and 2000.

It is
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clear
that there was a decline in the
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marriage
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rates
, while the divorce
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people
remained unchanged over the survey period. In the second chart, married group is the major proportion, whereas widowed and divorced
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people
are the minority groups.

In 1970, the number of
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marriage
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people
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is
2. 5
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million
. This is the largest number in both groups, and it maintained that
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rate
until 1980,
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reducing to
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only
2
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million
in the
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end
of the period. The divorces have smaller
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people
than married
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, with
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1million
in 1970. Although, there was slight increase in 1980, by 0. 4
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million
, the number of divorced
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people
returned to the starting point in two last years.

Moving to marital status
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part
, the highest percentage is the
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of
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people
who
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in 1970, at 70%, then fell to
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under 60% in 2000.
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, both
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of widowed and divorced
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are
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lowest
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with all of them are below 10% throughout the period.
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IELTS academic The chart of marriages and divorces rates in US between 1970 and 2000 and the marital status of adult American in the same period. v. 2

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
199 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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