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The chart below show the percentage of whole world population in four countries from 1950 to 2000 will projection till 2050 v.2

The chart below show the percentage of whole world population in four countries from 1950 to 2000 will projection till 2050 v. 2
The given histogram highlights the information about the whole world population had shown by 4 countries: India, China, USA and japan, from 1950 to 2000, and estimated population in the year 2050. It is calibrated in per centum. It can be seen that, in the year 1950, China had the highest population in comparison to other three nations, which were over a quarter. Despite of minute fall in the population of china, in the year 2000, still it had peak population in the world. In addition to this, it is estimated that the population of china will reach approximately 19% by 2050. Moreover, population of Japan remained the lowest in the century from 1950 to 2050. Moving further, India had showed opposing trend to china as population of India is 15%, which was considerably lower than china. However, population rose minutely to 19% and is expected to have highest population in the world. Apart from all this, population of USA falled from 10% to 8% from 1950 to 2000 and it is predicted that population will be steady in the year 2050. Overall, it is evident that china lead in population for first half of century, but India will over come it in the other half of century.
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histogram highlights the information about the whole world
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population
had shown by 4 countries: India, China, USA and japan, from 1950 to 2000, and estimated
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population
in the
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year
2050. It
is calibrated
in per centum.

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seen
that, in the
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year
1950, China had the highest
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population
in comparison
to other three nations, which were over a quarter.
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Despite of
minute fall in the
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population
of china, in the
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year
2000,
still
it had peak
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population
in the world.
In addition
to this, it
is estimated
that the
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population
of china will reach approximately 19% by 2050.
Moreover
,
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population
of Japan remained the lowest in the century from 1950 to 2050.

Moving
further
, India had
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showed
opposing trend to
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china
as
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population
of India is 15%, which was
considerably
lower than china.
However
,
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population
rose
minutely
to 19% and is
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expected
to have
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highest
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population
in the world. Apart from all this,
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population
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of USA
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falled
from 10% to 8% from 1950 to 2000 and it
is predicted
that
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population
will be steady in the
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year
2050.

Overall
, it is evident that china lead in
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population
for
first
half of century,
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but
India will over
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come
it in the other half of century.
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IELTS academic The chart below show the percentage of whole world population in four countries from 1950 to 2000 will projection till 2050 v. 2

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