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You have recently started work in a new company. Write a letter to an English speaking friend. In your letter: -explain why you changed jobs-describe your new job-tell him/her your other news v.6

You have recently started work in a new company. Write a letter to an English speaking friend. In your letter: -explain why you changed jobs-describe your new job-tell him/her your other news v. 6
Dear John, I hope you are enjoying your days with your wife in Canada! I am writing to you to let you know that I have recently join a new organization in Australia since last month. You must be wondering why I left my high paid job in India even after posted in my hometown. Actually, the life in Australia far better than India, and I have realized after visiting this country last year during my official trip. Since then, it becomes my dream to get a job and settle down here. I have joined an IT company - TCS, Australia as a software developer with handsome remuneration. Office ambience is so nice that I do not have words to explain compare to my office in India; colleagues are friendly and helpful, workload is moderate, and no more overtime. One more good news for you; I am blessed with a baby girl last month as well. My wife and daughter are currently with my parents in India due to obvious reason. They will shift to Australia after 6 months, when my daughter will stabilized. Hope to see you soon! Best regards, Bibhu Kalita
Dear John,

I hope you are enjoying your days with your wife in Canada! I am writing to you to
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let
you know that I have recently
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join
a new organization in Australia since last month. You
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be wondering why I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
left
my high paid job in India even after posted in my hometown. Actually, the life in Australia far better than India, and I have realized after visiting this country last year during my official trip. Since then, it becomes my dream to
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get
a job and settle down here.

I have
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joined
an IT
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company
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-
TCS, Australia as a software developer with handsome remuneration. Office ambience is
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so
nice that I do not have words to
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explain
compare to my office in India; colleagues are friendly and helpful, workload is moderate, and no more overtime.

One more
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good
news for you; I
am blessed
with a baby girl last month
as well
. My wife and daughter are
currently
with my parents in India due to obvious reason. They will shift to Australia after 6 months, when my daughter will
The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: "stabilize"
stabilized
.

Hope to
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see
you
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soon
!

Best regards,

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Bibhu
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Kalita
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
He who knows no foreign languages know nothing of his own.
Johann Wolfgang von Goethe

IELTS academic You have recently started work in a new company. Write a letter to an English speaking friend. In your letter: -explain why you changed jobs-describe your new job-tell him/her your other news v. 6

Academic
  American English
7 paragraphs
192 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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