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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? A person's childhood years (the time from birth to twelve years of age) are the most important years of a person's life. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.864

A person's childhood years (the time from birth to twelve years of age) are the most important years of a person's life. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 864
A common thought that is always we said by our ancestors is " learning during childhood is like curving in the rocks" in my vantage point, I full agree with this statement and feel parents should make use of children' s golden years of learning and provide them with the best experience for the following reasons. The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that people learn the most during childhood years. In this period a person learn the healthy way of living, such as sleep early, eat healthy, and study vigorously. Such learning skills are very hard to learn during adulthood. A vivid example which can illustrate my point is the experience I faced with by brother as an adult. Because he did learn to sleep early during childhood, he becomes a night person, and cannot outperform during the day. The second point which deserves some attention is that people during childhood learn to make friend. Friendship is the essence of life. Without having friends around life would be impossible. Some my argues that it is possible to live without close friends around, however, those people may not be the happiest people on earth. For instance, when I am in trouble, I need somebody to share with him or her what caused this trouble, and accordingly solutions to the problem. Thus, being open to others is a skill that a person learn during childhood and cannot learn as he or she grow older. Although the aforementioned reasons are first to cross by mind at a glance, they are by no means the only reasons available. Instead, there is another subtle point to be mentioned. The noteworthy, refreshingly, intelligible results of a study which was published in the childhood journal which showed that children are twice more capable of memorizing their lessons during childhood than when they grow older. In other words, children are like an empty page and a person can write on it what ever he wants. It could be something useful or something useless which is not beneficial. To wrap up, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons, one soon realizes that children can learn the most during the early years in life. As a result, parent should do their utmost to provide their children with the right advice they need.
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; learning during childhood is like curving in the
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, I full
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with this statement and feel parents should
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children&
#039; s golden years of learning and provide them with the best experience for the following reasons.

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first
exquisite
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point
to
be mentioned
is that
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people
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learn
the most during childhood years. In this period a
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person
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learn
the healthy way of living, such as sleep early, eat healthy, and study
vigorously
. Such learning
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skills
are
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very
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hard
to
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learn
during adulthood. A vivid example which can illustrate my
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point
is the experience I faced with by brother as an adult.
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Because
he did
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learn
to sleep early during childhood, he becomes a night
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person
, and cannot outperform during the day.

The second
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point
which deserves
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some
attention is that
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people
during childhood
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learn
to
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make
friend. Friendship is the essence of life. Without having friends around life would be impossible.
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that it is possible to
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live
without close friends around,
however
, those
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people
may not be the happiest
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people
on earth.
For instance
, when I am in trouble, I need somebody to share with him or her what caused this trouble, and
accordingly
solutions to the problem.
Thus
, being open to others is a
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skill
that a
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person
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learn
during childhood and cannot
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learn
as he or she
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grow
older.

Although the aforementioned reasons are
first
to cross by mind at a glance, they are by no means the
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only
reasons available.
Instead
, there is another subtle
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point
to
be mentioned
. The noteworthy,
refreshingly
, intelligible results of a study which
was published
in the childhood journal which
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showed
that
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children
are twice more capable of memorizing their lessons during childhood than when they grow older.
In other words
,
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children
are like an empty page and a
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person
can write on it what ever he wants. It could be something useful or something useless which is not beneficial.

To wrap up, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons, one
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soon
realizes that
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children
can
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learn
the most during the early years in life.
As a result
, parent should do their utmost to provide their
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children
with the right advice they need.
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26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS academic A person's childhood years (the time from birth to twelve years of age) are the most important years of a person's life. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 864

Academic
  American English
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382 words
5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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