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The bar chart shows components of GDP in the UK from 1992 to 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. v.2

The bar chart shows components of GDP in the UK from 1992 to 2000.
The given bar chart compares the information about the amount of products which were generated by IT industry and Service industry in the UK between 1992 and 2000. Overall, it can be seen that even though both industries showed upward trends year on year, IT industry surpassed the Service industry throughout the period in the question. As regards 1992 to 1996, IT industry stood at just over 6% in 1992, slightly higher than the Service industry at 4%. In the following two years (1994), both IT and Service industries experienced a gradual climb to 8% and 6. 5% correspondingly. Despite growing steadily, while IT witnessed a marginal drop to just under 8% in 1996, there was still a negligible growth to approximately 7% for the Service industry in the same year. Having dropped minimally, there was then a sharp rise in the generation of products from IT for the next four years, rocketing to about 15%, which was the highest figure of the whole term. On the other hand, the Service industry saw an insignificant swell to 8% from 6% in the final four years.
The
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given
bar chart compares the information about the amount of products which
were generated
by IT
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industry
and
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Service
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industry
in the UK between 1992 and 2000.

Overall
, it can be
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seen
that
even though
both
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industries
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showed
upward trends
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year
on
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year
, IT
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industry
surpassed the
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Service
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industry
throughout the period in the question.

As regards 1992 to 1996, IT
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industry
stood at
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just
over 6% in 1992,
slightly
higher than the
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Service
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industry
at 4%. In the following two years (1994), both IT and
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Service
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industries
experienced a gradual climb to 8% and 6. 5%
correspondingly
. Despite growing
steadily
, while IT witnessed a marginal drop to
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just
under 8% in 1996, there was
still
a negligible growth to approximately 7% for the
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Service
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industry
in the same year.

Having dropped
minimally
, there was then a sharp rise in the generation of products from IT for the
next
four years, rocketing to about 15%, which was the highest figure of the whole term.
On the other hand
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Service
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industry
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saw
an insignificant swell to 8% from 6% in the final four years.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS academic The bar chart shows components of GDP in the UK from 1992 to 2000.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
185 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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