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the graph below shows the number of passenger railway journeys made in great britain between 1950 and 2005 v.2

the graph below shows the number of passenger railway journeys made in great britain between 1950 and 2005 v. 2
The presented line graph outlines the numbers of passenger changes over 55 years time period in three different type of railway journey. A glance at a graph reveals that National rail network and London underground had the highest number of people over the span in contrast to the light rails and metro systems. National rail network had 1000 million passengers in the year 1950, as t figures reach its peak about 1100millions at 1960. it then began to decrease significantly for up to 20 years, rebound itself in the period of 1980 to 1990 with approximately 800 millions passenger which depicts similar features with London underground within this year, before that it had maintained the stable number of data which as around 700millions over the period of 30 years. This figures rose marginally by both, touching around 1100 at the end of the year 2004. In contrast, light rail and metro system had not any number of passengers up to 1990 and then it steadily increased 60 million, reaching around 180 million at the end of the year.
The presented line graph outlines the
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changes
over 55 years time period in three
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type of railway journey.

A glance at a graph reveals that National
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rail
network and London underground had the highest
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number
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people
over the span
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to the light rails and metro systems.

National
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rail
network had 1000
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million
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passengers
in the
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year
1950, as t figures reach its peak about
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1100millions
at 1960.
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it
then began to decrease
significantly
for up to 20 years, rebound itself in the period of 1980 to 1990 with approximately 800
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millions
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passenger
which depicts similar features with London underground within this
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year
,
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before
that it had maintained the stable
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number
of data which as around
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700millions
over the period of 30 years. This figures rose
marginally
by both, touching around 1100 at the
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end
of the
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year
2004.

In contrast
, light
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rail
and metro system had not any
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number
of
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passengers
up to 1990 and then it
steadily
increased 60
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million
, reaching around 180
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million
at the
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end
of the
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year
.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
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IELTS academic the graph below shows the number of passenger railway journeys made in great britain between 1950 and 2005 v. 2

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4 paragraphs
178 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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