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You have recently had a bad experience with Skylark Travels on a sight seeing tour package of 15 days Write to the travel company and explain What you were promised to avail as part of this tour What went wrong with the tour What should be done to compens v.2

You have recently had a bad experience with Skylark Travels on a sight seeing tour package of 15 days Write to the travel company and explain What you were promised to avail as part of this tour What went wrong with the tour What should be done to compens v. 2
Dear Sir, I am Satish Shah writing this letter to express my dissatisfaction on a sight-seeing tour that I had recently from your company. First of all, I booked your sight-seeing tour package of 15 days with five of my friends last month. One of my friends gave me your reference as he had very good experience with you in the past. So after consulting the manager of your agency and knowing detailed schedule of trip, I reserved six seats for us. He promised me about excellent quality food and stay in three star hotels during the journey. In start all went very well and we thoroughly enjoyed the food and hospitality of every hotel where we stayed. However, the hotel allocated for last two days was nowhere near to one star. Further, served food was also unhygienic and below average in taste. Apart from this, rooms were also not properly cleaned and had bad odor. In last, I would like you to take quick action in this matter. Also it would be great if you can implement customer feedback system which can give you fair idea of your services. Yours faithfully, Satish Shah
Dear Sir,

I am
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Satish
Shah writing this letter to express my dissatisfaction on a sight-seeing tour that I had recently from your
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company
.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, I booked your sight-seeing tour package of 15 days with five of my friends last month. One of my friends gave me your reference as he had
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
experience with you in the past.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
after consulting the manager of your agency and knowing detailed schedule of trip, I reserved six seats for us. He promised me about excellent quality food and stay in
'three star' is missing a hyphen.
three star
hotels during the journey. In
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
all went
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
well and
we
thoroughly
enjoyed the food and hospitality of every hotel where we stayed.
However
, the hotel allocated for last two days was nowhere near to one star.
Further
, served food was
also
unhygienic and below average in taste. Apart from this, rooms were
also
not
properly
cleaned and had
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
odor.

In last, I would like you to take quick action in this matter.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Also
it would be great if you can implement customer feedback system which can give you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
fair
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
of your services.

Yours
faithfully
,

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Satish
Shah
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
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IELTS academic You have recently had a bad experience with Skylark Travels on a sight seeing tour package of 15 days Write to the travel company and explain What you were promised to avail as part of this tour What went wrong with the tour What should be done to compens v. 2

Academic
  American English
6 paragraphs
193 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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