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The carts below give the information about workforce composition in the UK, and about average hourly earnings. v.2

The carts below give the information about workforce composition in the UK, and about average hourly earnings. v. 2
The graphs illustrate the data on the composition of the workforce in the United Kingdom and the average payment in an hour. Overall, most of the British employee is full-time men and just small fraction is part-time men. Both male and female received higher payment in full-time work. In the total of workforce almost a 25 million in the UK, almost a half that of proportion is full-time men (45%), while just over a quarter is female full-timer (28%). In contrast, women are likely to have a bigger composition of the part-time job than men, while the former accounts 21%, the letter is 6%. The figure of the hourly earning shows the amount of payment was higher in the 8 hours job than a part-time job. A full-timer man was paid at around 13 euro per hour, whereas the female received lower 2 euros that of men. However, the female part-timer was paid higher than male on a part-time job, while female received 8 euros, the male was compensated 7. 5 euros.
The graphs illustrate the data on the composition of the workforce in the United Kingdom and the average payment in an hour.

Overall
, most of the British employee is full-time
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small
fraction is part-time
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men
. Both male and
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female
received higher payment in full-time work.

In the total of workforce almost a 25 million in the UK, almost a half that of proportion is full-time
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men
(45%), while
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just
over a quarter is
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female
full-timer (28%).
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, women are likely to have a bigger composition of the part-time
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job
than
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men
, while the former accounts 21%, the letter is 6%.

The figure of the hourly earning
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the amount of payment was higher in the 8 hours
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job
than a part-time
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job
. A full-timer
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man
was paid
at around 13 euro per hour, whereas the
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female
received lower 2 euros that of
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men
.
However
, the
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female
part-timer
was paid
higher than male on a part-time
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job
, while
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female
received 8 euros, the male
was compensated
7. 5 euros.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The carts below give the information about workforce composition in the UK, and about average hourly earnings. v. 2

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4 paragraphs
172 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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